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On a Pale Horse (Umamusume/Youjo Senki)

In fact, I'm surprised by how little religion has been discussed in this story. While the Three Goddesses are merely background information, it's still relatively important to the Umas, although, as has been shown, they aren't great abstract thinkers, so it's unlikely there are many religious fanatics out there.
Why be surprised? Even in the animes,manga and Umamusume gacha game the whole 3 Goddesses thing is mainly confined to in setting lore what with the main focus being on racing.
 
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Based off of the reference image and Tanya's anime design, I did a quick sketch of how I imagine Shirogane looks. When I was coloring it, I almost defaulted to making her blonde before I remembered her name literally means silver. The other thing was the eyes being red, I feel like Tanya's glowing blue eyes when she's hopped on magic is a really iconic part of her character, so it almost feels weird to have them be red.

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I love the title, Tanya has the potential to become the fearsome Middle/Final boss of every new racer calling her the silver standard feels a lot heavier if she becomes like the final test/hurdle that differentiates the great runners from the legends.

I can easily imagine having a reputation of only being beaten by the truly great, she would either be always gold or silver, with many opponents breaking before her.
she could be the test of temperament and discipline of many.

The pale horse who never seems to tire, relentless in her own way if you are trying to catch up to her, but even worse if you are ahead of her, feeling the pressure and the burden of having her just right behind you pushing you little by little to either a victory or a breakdown.

You would probably have racers having their best recorded racing times against her by pressure alone, with only a few of them managing to endure and win.

I wonder if anyone will ever find out the truth about her, she isn't a race horse, she's a warhorse one who used to carry heavy armored riders, used to charge with a heavy burden without the choice to stop or slowdown, since that would most likely mean death.

I feel like that the kind of story that Umamusume fans would love.

The more you guys talk about this element of her being the Silver Standard, the more I think of her as a combination of Arm Anderson and the the White Mamba, individuals who know their strengths and weaknesses and knowing how to use them. And also having a mean streak.

Like I'm legitimately imagining at some point getting annoyed at some Uma who's trying get her riled up over her (actual) lack of speed and going full Sargent with

Listen you maggot, you are outdoing yourself in the unproductive behavior market, so I'm going to put you, and also all of you, in your place.
Yes, I'm not faster than Special Week, nor Grass Wonder, nor El Condor Pasa, and also use her full name for you are not her friend. Because guess what? If you threw a rock to a collection of Umas from Trace, chances are that you will hit some faster than me. Do you know why? Because everyone is faster than me!
No, seriously, everyone. Do you think that makes me happy? And instead of yapping or mopping or whatever else that uma in lane 6 keeps doing when we are in the same race, I persevere. I'm not the fastest, nor the strongest, nor the one with the pedigree, but I persevere, I adapt. I may not be able to out speed them, but I found I can certainly outlast them.
So I train my endurance, my strength, my guts and my wits and my technique. I race and I think to myself "Could hug the rail even more" "Could I improve my accelerating in the slope?" "Could I block them better?" and I train to become more than a one trick pony like you.
So get in line, pony, and stop wasting everybody's time.
And one last thing, pony. You say my speed is not even close to Special Week, but it's closer to all of them than you are to me.


Ok, this thing came a bit out of character.
 
The other thing was the eyes being red, I feel like Tanya's glowing blue eyes when she's hopped on magic is a really iconic part of her character, so it almost feels weird to have them be red.
Maybe her eyes go from red to blue when Shirogane finally gets into the zone.
 
And here's a work in progress sketch in a more realistic style. In the rough, I doodled the ear ornament without thinking about it much, but now I can't figure out where it should sit on her head, or how it should attach to her ear.

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They're kind of like Duramente's wing, but silver and on the back of her ears.

Edit. Also, Shirogane's hair is pretty smooth, given that she actually has a mother and grandmother that cares to make her look a bit more presentable (and girly)
Would it be similar to Air Groove's where it curls around the outside of the ear, instead of the inside like Duramente's?

I was going by Tanya's design, where her hair is really going all over the place, but it does make sense that her hair would be more tame in this life. The issue is retaining enough design elements to make her recognizably Tanya, maybe the shape of the hair remains mostly the same?
 
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I doodled the ear ornament without thinking about it much, but now I can't figure out where it should sit on her head, or how it should attach to her ear.
They're kind of like Duramente's wing, but silver and on the back of her ears.

Edit. Also, Shirogane's hair is pretty smooth, given that she actually has a mother and grandmother that cares to make her look a bit more presentable (and girly)

Would it be similar to Air Groove's where it curls around the outside of the ear, instead of the inside like Duramente's?
Sort of? They go more vertical along her ear.

The issue is retaining enough design elements to make her recognizably Tanya, maybe the shape of the hair remains mostly the same?
Salaryman looks completely different from Tanya so there's no real need to have Shirogane look similar to Tanya.
 
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And here's a work in progress sketch in a more realistic style. In the rough, I doodled the ear ornament without thinking about it much, but now I can't figure out where it should sit on her head, or how it should attach to her ear.

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Okily dokily, time for to offer some unsolicited advice!

First of all, do not change a single thing about the hair until coloring, except the pony tail. The rest of the hair is fucking perfect.

Honestly, the only real issue is that she is, forgive the expression, a bit horsefaced. The upper lip should be tightened up a bit, unless she is meant to have her mouth open, and the jawline brought up a corresponding amount. Maybe the tip of the nose brought down a hair.

Other than those nitpicks, very good.
 
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@WrandmWaffles already said that the way to get Shirogane frenzy is to get physical during race.
Hmmmmm... actually you know what? The one Uma in Tracen most likely to get Shirogane frenzied on the race track due to getting physical is the Terrorist of the Race Track herself,Stay Gold! She didnt get that nickname in real life for nothing either.
 
Honestly, the only real issue is that she is, forgive the expression, a bit horsefaced. The upper lip should be tightened up a bit, unless she is meant to have her mouth open, and the jawline brought up a corresponding amount. Maybe the tip of the nose brought down a hair.
Thanks for the advice, I made some changes to the face based on your direction. She still looks a bit horsefaced... I've always had trouble with faces, especially lips. I don't know why, maybe it's because I've been staring at it for so long, but somehow it feels like something about her expression changed.

Salaryman looks completely different from Tanya so there's no real need to have Shirogane look similar to Tanya.
Well, whether I intended for it or not, seems like she kept the fish lips. 😐

Also, Shirogane's hair is pretty smooth, given that she actually has a mother and grandmother that cares to make her look a bit more presentable (and girly)
I tried going for a silkier hairstyle compared to my initial sketch. It looks like she has a rather high ponytail in the reference image, and in Billjoebaggins' rendition the ponytail is closer to Tanya's, so I just aimed sort of in the middle.

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Also, I went and found a reference for the ear ornaments, it's not the right kind of medal, but the Polish jump wings are what I used. If you have an image of the actual medal, I'll use that as reference instead.

...Looking at it again, the ornaments on her ears are pretty massive compared to other ones.

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She still looks a bit horsefaced...
To be fair...that's not necessarily bad here, lol.

I tried going for a silkier hairstyle compared to my initial sketch. It looks like she has a rather high ponytail in the reference image, and in Billjoebaggins' rendition the ponytail is closer to Tanya's, so I just aimed sort of in the middle.
Yeah, that looks pretty good. It's not a very complex hairstyle or very long, since she's practical, but she has a comfortable life and can afford to make it look more orderly.

Also, I went and found a reference for the ear ornaments, it's not the right kind of medal, but the Polish jump wings are what I used
Those wings look great! Though they might be a bit oversized now that I look at it. As is I think she'd have trouble moving her ears in certain directions. Then again, if it's like a feather that wouldn't be that much of a problem.
 
The Pale Horse by TheSmallSauce New
Added a rough sketch of a kurtka with another jacket draped over her shoulder as an alternative G1 outfit, since the Tracen uniform felt out of place with her expression being so severe. Also made the wing smaller and let the Three Goddesses decide how it stays attached. I think I'll probably stop here, with this version.

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I also had some fun with some typography for a poster/cover. If anyone feels like adding color, please feel free.

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I think everybody would enjoy this story more if they treated it as a slice-of-life anime and relax a bit. There is no Being X or Mary or yakuza thugs waiting in the wings to kill Shirogane's family and turn her into a Sasuke Uchiha avengering angel or whatever. At the worst, there is highschool-level cliques and sports politics between the umas but everyone seems to be decent people at their core.

Rousseau was right in this universe. Hobbes can eat a bowl of salad for dinner. Without any carrots!
 
Shirogane might become known as the Gatekeeper. Other Umas have trouble just getting out of the starting gate when she's around. She's a Tracen student, but is widely considered one of the slower racers there, so if you can't beat her, don't even bother challenging the other Tracen runners. She's also good at positioning and tracking others behind her, which means if you don't have enough speed over her, she may still be able to block you from passing.
 
I think everybody would enjoy this story more if they treated it as a slice-of-life anime and relax a bit. There is no Being X or Mary or yakuza thugs waiting in the wings to kill Shirogane's family and turn her into a Sasuke Uchiha avengering angel or whatever. At the worst, there is highschool-level cliques and sports politics between the umas but everyone seems to be decent people at their core.

Rousseau was right in this universe. Hobbes can eat a bowl of salad for dinner. Without any carrots!
I agree. While that possibility of conflict is tantalizing, this just isn't that kind of story.
 
Added a rough sketch of a kurtka with another jacket draped over her shoulder as an alternative G1 outfit, since the Tracen uniform felt out of place with her expression being so severe. Also made the wing smaller and let the Three Goddesses decide how it stays attached. I think I'll probably stop here, with this version.
Other Uma's
"oh no, she's looking at us!"
"She doesn't even think we're a threat to her"
"We're all gonna die!"

Meanwhile, shirgane
"I wonder what I should make for dinner."
 
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Now combine that with Special Weeks' special hatred of chestnut coated horses and we're in business.

"Chestnut Coat with a Red Gradient" is the specific target of Special Week's disdain. Special Week had the same level of discomfort with non red-gradient chestnut horses as with basically any horse that isn't Mejiro Dober, famously getting along perfectly fine with Screen Hero, a son of Grass Wonder who was a chestnut coat without the gradient.
 
While I do think some Uma's might take Shirogane a little too seriously I agree with others, She would be trying to have a happy life, and while she can be intense she can always have her silly moments, or things that make her look cute even if its unintentional.

For example she would totally hate to have to sing and dance after every race, probably being really awkward dancing and not really finding her style of songs until later.
And yet still having a lovely singing voice, I can see her getting fans because despite her serious attitude end maybe even cold demeanor once she has to dance and sing she's all flustered or trying too hard.

Songs like
Los Los Los
JINGO JUNGLE
Sensen no Realism
Are how I imagine her singing would go

Or maybe songs more related to religion
Ave Maria

Or maybe something or fantasy
Record of Lodoss War

If they are going to make her sing she can at least try to use some of her knowledge of other languages to sing songs in German, English and even French.

her Gap Moe would be really strong even if she´s unaware of it, with her fans discussing about the type of Dere she really is.

Something kinda silly so other don't take it too seriously, and the general feeling is more fun and less grim break the newbs tone.
 
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...
—"In the number one position, it is our pleasure to present one of the favorites: Shirogane Orzel. This is her twenty-first professional race, and if she crosses the finish line in first place, she will claim her third G1 victory. Can the most tireless runner of this generation impose her pace and devour the distance in this Tenno Sho? The crowd roars at the presence of the 'Silver Eagle's'!"


The Silver Standard





She was still watching the results board, still letting the word first settle properly inside her, when movement on a television mounted high in the concourse caught the edge of her eye. It was displaying another race from earlier in the day.

Silver hair streamed behind an umamusume alone on the final bend, stride clean and mercilessly efficient. The conclusion was so obvious that the commentator's voice rose before she had even entered the homestretch.

"—and Shirogane Orzeru will claim her second graded victory!"

Merry's smile held, though something in it had changed.

On the screen, Shirogane crossed the line alone.





The screen in her trainer's office was still playing the replay.

Merry had stopped pretending she was only glancing at it after the second loop. Her notebook lay forgotten on the desk in front of her.

The race footage showed the course from an angle slightly too far above to feel real, the track laid out almost like the diagrams on the whiteboard. Runners bunched early, then stretched thin as the pace split them apart. Only one figure resisted the pattern: a pale blur that continued to lengthen an already absurd gap.

Merry leaned forward without meaning to.

Shirogane didn't look like she was running fast.

There was no visible strain or dramatic shift in form, no final push even as she turned the last corner. Her stride remained even, almost casual, as though an entire race at that pace was the most natural thing in the world.

Merry blinked once.

"…She is a frontrunner, right?" she asked quietly.

Her trainer, standing beside her with a clipboard tucked under one arm, nodded. "Like you, yes. Just that she starts accelerating extremely early for a frontrunner."

Accelerate.

Merry replayed the word in her head as the footage reached the final straight. It just didn't fit with what she was seeing.

Shirogane didn't accelerate, to Merry it seemed like she didn't need to. The gap was already far too wide to close.



Her fingers tightened around the edge of the desk.

Her trainer noticed.

"You're doing it again," he said.

"Doing what?"

"Watching someone else and trying to run their race."

He picked up the remote and froze the screen mid-stride.

Shirogane's form remained maddeningly unchanged even stationary.

"I'll be frank with you, Merry, I don't entirely like what I'm seeing."

She blinked. "You don't?"

"I respect it," he corrected. "I'm even a little scared of it, but that's beside the point."

He gestured at the screen.

"No late-race fatigue. Hardly any wasted motion. No panic response when challenged. She runs at a runaway pace and somehow finishes composed. That is not normal."

Merry glanced back at the image.

"It looks effective."

"It looks expensive," he said dryly, ticking off points on his fingers. "In training, in conditioning, in strain. And we have no idea what kind of workload supports it."

He set the remote down on the desk between them and sat down opposite her.

"For all we know, she's built years of stamina around that style. Maybe she's gambling soundness for results. Or perhaps she's simply exceptional."

He met her eyes directly.

"But copying results without understanding the process behind them is how runners break themselves."

Merry said nothing.

Her gaze drifted back to the paused image of Shirogane.

"…So you're saying I shouldn't try."

"I'm saying you shouldn't imitate something you don't understand."

He let that sit for a moment.

"Besides, you already have strengths she doesn't. Better top speed and acceleration, for one. Do you think you could accelerate like you did in your most recent race if you ran the whole thing like her?"

She shook her head.

"Exactly," His tone softened slightly. "So don't lose what already works for you. Just run your race."

A long silence followed before Merry exhaled through her nose and nodded once.

"...Alright. I'll run my race."

Some of the tension left his shoulders.

"Good," he said, reaching for the registration papers beside him and sliding one free. "There's one more thing."

He set the paper down between them.

"She's entered the same race we were planning for."

"What?"





The gates sprang open and Merry broke cleanly.

Relief flashed through her in the same instant as motion, she hadn't stumbled or hesitated, and she settled into her opening routine almost immediately, driving forward for a few strong steps before easing into the position she had been trained to hold. The pack gathered around her in a familiar storm of hoofbeats and breath, everything was unfolding exactly as it should.

The rail slid past in smooth white segments. Turf flicked lightly against her calves from runners behind. She stayed with the lead group without forcing anything, shoulders low, cadence even, conserving what she could while keeping herself where she needed to be.

For the first hundred metres, the race made sense.

Pressure at her flank. Another runner half a length outside. Someone tucked behind her shoulder, waiting for an opening. The familiar dance of positioning and patience she'd experienced countless times in practice.

Then she saw it. Shirogane had moved ahead, clear of the lead group.

Not abruptly, like with a breakaway born of effort or risk, but gradually; she hadn't stopped accelerating even as the other runners had settled into their natural positions.

Merry had studied this. She knew the explanation. She had accepted it as a viable strategy.

And yet seeing it now, without meaning to, she found herself thinking: something about this is wrong!

... En

Merry forced her attention back to her own running.

Do not chase. Run your race.

Her trainer's voice was clear in her mind now, sharper than the crowd, sharper than instinct.

Run your race.

So she did. She kept position within the lead group, resisting the urge to respond as others around her began to lose their composure under the pressure of Shirogane's pace. One by one they stretched, then slipped backward, the field thinning as the front resolved itself into something far simpler:

Distance.

By the time they reached the far turn, Shirogane was still extending away.

Merry could feel the strain building now, not from panic but from awareness. The race was continuing forward without her permission, and yet she remained exactly where she had been instructed to stay. Every instinct that urged her to respond was met with something steadier, more deliberate.

Discipline.

Not yet. Final leg. Follow the plan.

The straight approached, and Merry shifted. She gathered everything she had been preserving, every reserve carefully held back for this moment. Her breathing tightened, her stride lengthened, and the world narrowed into a single line of pursuit.

She detonated.

The turf practically broke beneath her, each step carrying more power than the last and sending clods of turf flying in her wake. The gap to Shirogane began to shrink, slowly at first, then all at once as Merry committed fully to the run she had prepared for.

Five lengths.

Three.

A length and a half.

For a brief moment, it felt as though the calculation had been correct, as though the plan was finally resolving itself into reality.

Then something changed.

Not in Shirogane, but in Merry.

It felt like a switch had flipped and all of a sudden, her legs burned and breathing felt impossible. Each breath came shallower than the last, each stride costing more than it should have, not because anything ahead had changed, but because she had reached the boundary of what she could sustain.

The gap stopped closing.

Then it held.

Then it began to widen.

Merry pushed harder, searching for something beyond the limit she was already standing inside, but there was nothing left to take. The race did not slow. The distance did not yield. It simply slipped out of her control.

One length.

One and a half.

Two.

The final straight blurred around her as willpower melted into desperation and raw animal instinct. She kept running because there was nothing else to do, because stopping was not part of her nature, because the line still existed even if the outcome had already been decided.

Shirogane crossed first.

Seven lengths later, Merry Soon crossed second.





Seven.

Merry kept thinking of it even after she had left the track. Her trainer spoke, doors opened and closed, people moved around her, but the number stayed where it was.

Seven lengths.

It sounded harmless, almost innocent when spoken aloud, like a measurement from someone else's life. But on the television screen in the office, it looked like a guilty verdict.

The race footage froze at the finish line.

First.

Seven lengths.

Second.

Merry stood in front of the television, towel still draped over her shoulders, hair damp against her neck. She watched herself cross the line again. Not first, not even close enough for comfort. Behind her, the field resolved into shapes that no longer mattered. Ahead, only one figure remained clear.

"—and Shirogane Oruzeru extends her lead decisively in the final stretch! A commanding finish!"

The announcer's voice cut through the replay loop, unchanged from the moment it had been recorded.

Merry frowned slightly at that. Commanding felt too small a word for what it had been.

Her trainer stood a few steps behind her, arms crossed. "You ran well," he said.

Merry didn't answer immediately. On screen, she saw herself again: straining now, shoulders rising, stride shortening in the final meters. Not collapsing, but no longer gaining.

Just… staying.

"I didn't win," she said at last, deflated. "I couldn't."

"No," he agreed carefully, turning the television off. "You didn't, but you ran it right."

Merry replayed the finish in her head without the screen now. The moment she had tried to close the gap and found that the gap did not respond.

Silence followed before Merry finally turned her head slightly.

"She didn't even—" She stopped, searching for the right word. "She wasn't even tired."

Her trainer folded his arms. "No… She wasn't."

That sentence made something ugly tighten in her chest.

"I waited," Merry said slowly, almost to herself. "I ran my race. I trained hard. I did what we planned."

"You did."

Her brow furrowed. "Then why did it feel like it was over before the final straight?"

I love the title, Tanya has the potential to become the fearsome Middle/Final boss of every new racer calling her the silver standard feels a lot heavier if she becomes like the final test/hurdle that differentiates the great runners from the legends.

I can easily imagine having a reputation of only being beaten by the truly great, she would either be always gold or silver, with many opponents breaking before her.
she could be the test of temperament and discipline of many.

The pale horse who never seems to tire, relentless in her own way if you are trying to catch up to her, but even worse if you are ahead of her, feeling the pressure and the burden of having her just right behind you pushing you little by little to either a victory or a breakdown.

You would probably have racers having their best recorded racing times against her by pressure alone, with only a few of them managing to endure and win.

I wonder if anyone will ever find out the truth about her, she isn't a race horse, she's a warhorse one who used to carry heavy armored riders, used to charge with a heavy burden without the choice to stop or slowdown, since that would most likely mean death.

I feel like that the kind of story that Umamusume fans would love.

Shirogane might become known as the Gatekeeper. Other Umas have trouble just getting out of the starting gate when she's around. She's a Tracen student, but is widely considered one of the slower racers there, so if you can't beat her, don't even bother challenging the other Tracen runners. She's also good at positioning and tracking others behind her, which means if you don't have enough speed over her, she may still be able to block you from passing.

I love this idea, because it feeds on something common in both Youjo Senki and a lot of the fanfics: Tanya is operating in a whole different perspective as her contemporaries.

All, from the gate fillers to the constant winners, are operating on a sports anime perspective: rivals make you better, sportsmanship, centering their lives on the races.

Shirogane does not really cares. She may learn and be part on some of the tangents related to the running, but I don't see her even remembering the names of most racers, or even understand the importance of the race in question beyond the winning pool.

With that being said, I think her career should be more like Stay Gold, a long career with only 1, maybe 2, G1 victories.

However, considering we're operating on the idea of Shiro running as much as possible, she will probably run all over the G2 and G3 circuit so long the money is right. So while the general audience will remember Shirogane as habitual runner, known for her endurance and her Iron Uma fame (basically running more races than any other Tracer Uma), the more hardcore fans and more regional watchers will know her as the Pale Horse of the Umapocalyse. I imagine the blogs dreading over their waifu prospects going against the Fourth Uma of the Apocalypse, and calling those Uma that she talks with in a constant basis (her friends, basically) as the War, Plague and Famine. And also celebrating when their younglings manage to at least not die on the track.

Like, imagine the polls done between fans in which they receive a combination of the following three answers:

A) She's a good Uma, she's always fighting for the top on as many races she can.
B) She's the one you know you can rely on being on the race and giving her all.
C) She's the Devil and the JRA should do something about it.

And I suppose if you don't go for the eagle motif, there's always... Gilded Gatekeeper, or perhaps you're in the mood for... Graded Glutton, or maybe even... Devil of the Grind? Yeah, sorry I'll see myself out.

I think it depends on who you ask. Her official moniker may be the Silver Standard or Polish WarUma. But to those that ran in G2 and G3 she's going to be Death, destroyer of Umas.

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Y'know, put like this, I can see Shirogane fitting well into the role of a hybrid racer-trainer. With how durable she is and how prolific she would become from running in so many races, I don't find it unlikely that a trainer or uma struggling with longer distances would request her help as a training partner. With her level of control over her pace and endless stamina, she would basically be the perfect pacesetter.

Also, fun fact, the lead runner/pacesetter in a marathon is also sometimes called a rabbit, so in a way, all the other umas would be... chasing the rabbit. x3
 

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