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On a Pale Horse (Umamusume/Youjo Senki)

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If he tries that shit with Shirogane, the injuries (and legal action) he'll face will be very much NOT of the comedic variety.
Honestly I'm not sure that he's even human. He took four simultaneous kicks to the body from four Uma that sent him flying several metres, his insides should be paste, but he just... Gets up and walks it off.
 
Humans in umamusume are more durable than humans IRL because Umas are just born to them at random. It would be a real problem for whoever is reincarnating the horses if they kept accidentally pulping non-Umas. Especially since they're all girls.
 
Yeah, that's the set she probably has the best chance at winning a triple crown for. It also helps that those races aren't one time entries compared to the Classic Triple Crown, which spoilers, Shirogane has low odds of winning

And given Shirogane's resilience, she could theoretically run those races year after year until most of her bigger competitors retire.

I have the odd image of Shiro just being around for multiple generations like some kind of weird ass fixtures.
Like the woman who was the mother and grandmother of multiple emperors and lived til 106 in a time when people lived til like... 50.


I imagine if Shirogane had been a real racing mare, when she retired there'd be a lot of interest in pairing her with the Sunday Silence line, such as Fuji Kiseki, to see if they could get a mix of speedy horse and small, durable horse. There'd probably also be hope that her even temperament would balance out the eccentricities that came down the Stay Gold line too.
Ok but Tachion and Shiro baby would be like a 9mm bullet.
Shirogane: "Huh, this is a lot of money for a young adult to make. I wonder how far I can take this? Obviously not a lifelong career, but..."
She would proceed to run for over 10 racing generations.
It really drives home that Shirogane's main motivation is her family, followed by money to help said family. It's the first thing she brings up in conversation about her weekend, not her debut race, it's the first thing on her mind. Furthermore, she spends more time at the start of the chapter reflecting on her time spent with her family & family friends than the race itself. And I have a feeling that the gap between Shirogane and her classmates is only going to continue to grow so long as they don't pick up on or learn that for Shirogane, family is #1, not races.
Special Week might have the best chance in the class to close the mental gap because she was also raised by a human and has a big family bent.
Royal Flush? Dual Monarch?
Triple Jewel?
Like loose gems off a crown and a Tiara.

Because while she's undersized and underspeed for a racehorse, Shirogane is actually quite large and extraordinarily fast for a warhorse.
Girl goes to visit her family in poland and is the tallest Uma in 100 miles.
Neo Universe having daymares around Shirogane and Manhattan Cafe wondering why her friend runs away from Shirogane.
Neo Universe is gonna have ah bad time.
Doctor: She has PTSD, specifically based on world war two.
Trainer: Fucking WHAT!?
 
I'm surprised no publicist has taken an interest in Shirogane yet. Her story has all the elements of a celebrated hero. Born an Uma to two working-class human parents, Shirogane trained diligently every day despite their limited means. She worked as the delivery girl for her parents' restaurant, becoming well-known for her speed running through the streets. One day, a famous manager noticed her potential and brought her to Tracen, even though her top speed was lower than others. It's a classic underdog story, and I'm amazed Shirogane hasn't leveraged it yet.
 
Wasn't the war that Tanya fought in more similar to WWI, not WWII?
Depends on which phase of the war you're talking about. She had at least a year of trench warfare, but then other parts do seem to lean into WW2. We even have a defeated Not!French leader fleeing not!France after his country's occupation.
 
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I'm surprised no publicist has taken an interest in Shirogane yet. Her story has all the elements of a celebrated hero. Born an Uma to two working-class human parents, Shirogane trained diligently every day despite their limited means. She worked as the delivery girl for her parents' restaurant, becoming well-known for her speed running through the streets. One day, a famous manager noticed her potential and brought her to Tracen, even though her top speed was lower than others. It's a classic underdog story, and I'm amazed Shirogane hasn't leveraged it yet.
She probs will, the immediate aftermath was the latest chapter afterall. Though she's gonna need a few more win for people to start getting hooked.

Who knows, maybe she got lucky and someone noticed her and her goldmine of a background, but that's a long stretch.
 
It is primarily WW1, with large elements of WW2

E.g. some technologies like Pz IVs, Carl Gustav railway guns, the classic WW2 era German transport plane, etc
She has to secure a big enough win that the "movie" can end on a good note. We love a underdog story, but a underdog story where the underdog doesn't beat the odds is tragic.
 
Well since history has the same beats the mongol conquest happened and if we translate the size of mongol warhorses to umamusume would mean a horde of umamusume range in height of nishino flower to tamano cross ravaged Eurasia mainland.

That might have left a certain weariness to short umas outside Japan.
 
Well since history has the same beats the mongol conquest happened and if we translate the size of mongol warhorses to umamusume would mean a horde of umamusume range in height of nishino flower to tamano cross ravaged Eurasia mainland.

That might have left a certain weariness to short umas outside Japan.
Eh, given Shirogane is apparently a little taller than most umas of her family, there isn't any lingering weariness towards short umas, if there ever was.
 
Well since history has the same beats the mongol conquest happened and if we translate the size of mongol warhorses to umamusume would mean a horde of umamusume range in height of nishino flower to tamano cross ravaged Eurasia mainland.

That might have left a certain weariness to short umas outside Japan.
Just from female humans and local umas. In this history, the mongol-umapyoi's were probably legendary... and just as genetically significant.
 
It just clicked today for me one of the big reasons I really like this story. A concept I've always been fascinated with is a story or fic where the main character chooses to reject the plot or 'refuse the call', instead doing their own thing. Now naturally in a regular piece of fiction this falls apart near-instantly because there has to be something happening, but fanfiction has the ability to tread closer to that line, although it too rarely ever fully explorers that idea because again, it would be a short piece bc "person who refuses to do anything" isn't exactly the most engaging story. But the idea has still fascinated me nonetheless, especially since the few fics that even approach the subject tend to just give a nod towards the idea and then abandon it wholesale, or worse, continuously insist that the MC wants to avoid getting involved or something while always having them get involved with little to no resistance or actively doing the exact opposite of what they keep telling the readers they want to do.

This fic, this wonderful fic, is finally scratching that itch after years and years of it nesting in the back of my head. Now, Shirogane isn't intentionally avoiding the 'plot' or anything, and she is nominally going along with the flow of Umamusume and sports stories, but internally she's completely shut it down. Making friends & rivals on the field? It's a job and they're competitors, she won't be hostile but she's more or less disinterested. Aiming to win? It would be nice, but so long as she can take home money and continue qualifying for races she'll be happy. Racing is her dream? No, it's just an opportunity to make decent money that came up, she doesn't really care much about it. The racing money isn't even a huge deal either, she's not some money-obsessed antagonist like in some shows, no, she'd be perfectly happy making money somewhere else, or hell even just working her family's restaurant, this is just an opportunity she's making use of. Shirogane cares about her family, and that's what she's completely oriented around, being completely content with her life otherwise.

In other words, just by being herself, she essentially 'rejects' the premise and plot of a normal Umamusume or sports manga series, all while still providing a compelling narrative with how she explores the world with her unique viewpoint and how this world divinely-designed for racing and sports-manga stuff reacts to her sheer indifference to its existence.

TLDR: This story is pulling off something I've wanted to see done for years now, I'm really happy with how it's working, and I can't wait to see more of it, even if it does change or drift away from this as it develops and Shirogane reacts & grows
 
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wait, is cousin alt-universe salary-man? (1) unclear same school (2) similar speech patterns (3) going into management... and they like instantly clicked. My bet is less 'love-interest' and more 'he's literal v1 in Ume-Land and 18'
 
Historically speaking the mongolian soldiers had something like 5-20 horses each man. Translating that to umas it would be a terrifying number of superhuman horses girls fighting.

So in umamusume-verse, each and every single Mongolian soldier was a Shogun-level harem protagonist? It's no wonder the Mongols conquered half the world.
 
Question because I'm not super familiar with the horse/uma racing rules and regulations. Is it possible that Shirogane and Steady Distance will end up in the same race at some point? I think it'd be interesting to see Shiro get to race someone she actually considers a friend. She wouldn't hold back, and I can't imagine Steady Distance would either, but they have a bond that I think a lot of the other umas and characters would be surprised to see through their banter and their interactions before & after the race. Also maybe it would be a race that Shiro would actually have some actual fun in, given she seemed to get some enjoyment out of running with Steady Distance, even if the job would come first in her mind, as usual
 
Question because I'm not super familiar with the horse/uma racing rules and regulations. Is it possible that Shirogane and Steady Distance will end up in the same race at some point? I think it'd be interesting to see Shiro get to race someone she actually considers a friend. She wouldn't hold back, and I can't imagine Steady Distance would either, but they have a bond that I think a lot of the other umas and characters would be surprised to see through their banter and their interactions before & after the race. Also maybe it would be a race that Shiro would actually have some actual fun in, given she seemed to get some enjoyment out of running with Steady Distance, even if the job would come first in her mind, as usual
I mean they both can meet at one of the Triple Crown or Triple Tiara race , just need the meet the quota to have a slot but it might be harder to Steady Distance cause she is training and race at the local circuit while Shirogane is study and train at Tracen which is still consider to be the cream of the crop, at national level everything is different higher level ,even the student canteen is stronger the chef too.
 
I mean they both can meet at one of the Triple Crown or Triple Tiara race , just need the meet the quota to have a slot but it might be harder to Steady Distance cause she is training and race at the local circuit while Shirogane is study and train at Tracen which is still consider to be the cream of the crop, at national level everything is different higher level ,even the student canteen is stronger the chef too.
For the Crown/Tiara races, it's impossible as Steady started earlier and is already a Senior racer with at least one graded race win by this point. To clarify, the Japanese Classic Crown/Tiara races can only be ran by athletes in their Classic year (in irl this would be a horse's 3-year old season).

They can meet if Shirogane participates in one of the exchange races, usually dirt, in her Classic year onwards.
 
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For the Crown/Tiara races, it's impossible as Steady started earlier and is already a Senior racer with at least one graded race win by this point. To clarify, the Japanese Classic Crown/Tiara races can only be ran by athletes in their Classic year (in irl this would be a horse's 3-year old season).

They can meet if Shirogane participates in one of the exchange races, usually dirt, in her Classic year onwards.
Thank you for the information , hmm the more you know , oh well i guess Steady Distance just have to cheer for Shirogane at the race track then or through the TV screen
 
It just clicked today for me one of the big reasons I really like this story. A concept I've always been fascinated with is a story or fic where the main character chooses to reject the plot or 'refuse the call', instead doing their own thing. Now naturally in a regular piece of fiction this falls apart near-instantly because there has to be something happening, but fanfiction has the ability to tread closer to that line, although it too rarely ever fully explorers that idea because again, it would be a short piece bc "person who refuses to do anything" isn't exactly the most engaging story. But the idea has still fascinated me nonetheless, especially since the few fics that even approach the subject tend to just give a nod towards the idea and then abandon it wholesale, or worse, continuously insist that the MC wants to avoid getting involved or something while always having them get involved with little to no resistance or actively doing the exact opposite of what they keep telling the readers they want to do.

This fic, this wonderful fic, is finally scratching that itch after years and years of it nesting in the back of my head. Now, Shirogane isn't intentionally avoiding the 'plot' or anything, and she is nominally going along with the flow of Umamusume and sports stories, but internally she's completely shut it down. Making friends & rivals on the field? It's a job and they're competitors, she won't be hostile but she's more or less disinterested. Aiming to win? It would be nice, but so long as she can take home money and continue qualifying for races she'll be happy. Racing is her dream? No, it's just an opportunity to make decent money that came up, she doesn't really care much about it. The racing money isn't even a huge deal either, she's not some money-obsessed antagonist like in some shows, no, she'd be perfectly happy making money somewhere else, or hell even just working her family's restaurant, this is just an opportunity she's making use of. Shirogane cares about her family, and that's what she's completely oriented around, being completely content with her life otherwise.

In other words, just by being herself, she essentially 'rejects' the premise and plot of a normal Umamusume or sports manga series, all while still providing a compelling narrative with how she explores the world with her unique viewpoint and how this world divinely-designed for racing and sports-manga stuff reacts to her sheer indifference to its existence.

TLDR: This story is pulling off something I've wanted to see done for years now, I'm really happy with how it's working, and I can't wait to see more of it, even if it does change or drift away from this as it develops and Shirogane reacts & grows
Thank you for describing exactly how many of us feel about this story.

Many of us have surely watched numerous sports series and/or movies, so we're very familiar with the general archetype of a protagonist in such works: passionate, talented, hardworking, and above all, with a deep love for their respective sport.

That's why it's so refreshing to see a protagonist like Shirogane. The author didn't fall into the trap of creating a Usain Bolt-type character—that is, a lazy but absurdly talented protagonist who, with minimal effort, effortlessly surpasses their rivals, all of whom take their sport much more seriously.

But Shirogane is much more interesting because, while she is objectively talented, she's nowhere near a prodigy on par with veterans with years of experience. Every time she wins, it doesn't feel like the author is simply handing her victories, because we've seen how seriously she takes her training. She never mocks or belittles her rivals, and she's incredibly humble about her own abilities.

It's fascinating to see how Shirogane's... well, Shirogane's very being affects other characters so much. She shatters Tracen's echo chamber of sportsmanship and youthful passion by simply treating Uma races with the same professionalism as a real job, while practically every other girl talks about dreams and glory. She's almost like an adult reminding children not to play too rough or someone will get hurt.

I wouldn't be surprised if, throughout the story, several Uma begin to feel almost personally offended by Shirogane's professional detachment. If a dispassionate, dreamless Uma who only races for money consistently gets better results than you, what are you supposed to do? Dream even harder?
 
Omake: Chasing the Rabbit New


The Silver Standard





The roar of the crowd reached her a half-second late, as though sound itself had needed time to catch up. Merry Soon barely heard it.

Her own breathing drowned out nearly everything else, sharp and hot in her ears as she drove herself through the final meters of the straight. Hoofbeats thundered behind and around her, close enough to threaten, not close enough to matter. Her stride had begun to fray at the edges, form threatening to loosen, shoulders to rise, knees to shorten. She forced everything back into place through sheer willpower, jaw clenched so tightly it ached.

The post rushed toward her.

Then past.

She took a few more steps at full speed before instinct finally surrendered to reality. Her body protested the sudden easing all at once; lungs aflame, legs trembling, every pulse in her veins striking like a hammer. She slowed unevenly, chest heaving, hands braced against her thighs.

For several seconds, the world narrowed to the track beneath her shoes. Then it came flooding back.

Announcer's voice, bright with practiced excitement. The stamp of feet in the stands. Applause washing over the course in rolling waves. Numbers flashing onto the board overhead.

First.

Her gaze locked there.

First.

It was almost embarrassingly plain when displayed like that. A single number, yes, yet it seemed to swallow every doubt she had carried into the starting gates.

She straightened slowly as she cast her gaze over her shoulder. The other runners were pulling up further behind, some disappointed, some merely tired. One caught her eye and offered a sportsmanlike nod. Merry returned it automatically, hardly aware she had done so. A race official gestured her toward the winner's path and she followed, her legs feeling oddly light, as if the strain of the run belonged to someone else.

At the edge of the track, her trainer was waiting.

He was trying to hold it together for the cameras, but his composure cracked the moment she reached him.

"You did it," he said, voice breaking despite himself. "You actually did it."

Merry blinked, then laughed once in disbelief. "Of course I did."

The answer came out lighter than she felt. Beneath it, something tighter had only just begun to unwind.

He handed her a towel, still shaking his head. "Strong break from the gate, held your pace until the final corner. You ran exactly as we planned."

"It got pretty close though." She said as she dabbed absently at the sweat on her brow, eyes straying once more to the results board, as though it might vanish if left unattended.

Around them, staff moved briskly, spectators chattered, cameras turned toward the enclosure. Somewhere nearby, someone said her name with the bright surprise reserved for newcomers who had done something noteworthy.

Despite the close call, Merry felt the corners of her mouth lift.

Victory. This was what it was meant to feel like.

All the mornings, all the drills, all the praise that had followed her since childhood hadn't been misplaced. She belonged here, at the highest level, and she had proved it in the only way that mattered.

Winning.

For a few precious seconds, she felt complete.

Her trainer was speaking beside her, already talking about recovery, next steps, what races to run next.

His words slid over her.

She was still watching the results board, still letting the word first settle properly inside her, when movement on a television mounted high in the concourse caught the edge of her eye. It was displaying another race from earlier in the day.

Silver hair streamed behind an umamusume alone on the final bend, stride clean and mercilessly efficient. The conclusion was so obvious that the commentator's voice rose before she had even entered the homestretch.

"—and Shirogane Orzeru will claim her second graded victory!"

Merry's smile held, though something in it had changed.

On the screen, Shirogane crossed the line alone.





The screen in her trainer's office was still playing the replay.

Merry had stopped pretending she was only glancing at it after the second loop. Her notebook lay forgotten on the desk in front of her.

The race footage showed the course from an angle slightly too far above to feel real, the track laid out almost like the diagrams on the whiteboard. Runners bunched early, then stretched thin as the pace split them apart. Only one figure resisted the pattern: a pale blur that continued to lengthen an already absurd gap.

Merry leaned forward without meaning to.

Shirogane didn't look like she was running fast.

There was no visible strain or dramatic shift in form, no final push even as she turned the last corner. Her stride remained even, almost casual, as though an entire race at that pace was the most natural thing in the world.

Merry blinked once.

"…She is a frontrunner, right?" she asked quietly.

Her trainer, standing beside her with a clipboard tucked under one arm, nodded. "Like you, yes. Just that she starts accelerating extremely early for a frontrunner."

Accelerate.

Merry replayed the word in her head as the footage reached the final straight. It just didn't fit with what she was seeing.

Shirogane didn't accelerate, to Merry it seemed like she didn't need to. The gap was already far too wide to close.

The runners behind her posed no threat at all, each attempt to close the distance collapsing as they panicked and rushed, all thrown off by her blistering pace and exhausted in their failed attempts to keep up. Shirogane herself remained unfazed, seeming to grow more energetic as she neared the finishing post. It didn't make any sense, at least not in any way that could be put into words.

The replay looped again before a tap on the shoulder broke her focus.

"You've gone quiet again," her trainer observed carefully.

"I'm thinking."

"Okay." He took the remote from her, skipping back to the final stretch again. "I'm guessing it's about her final spurt."

Shirogane's face appeared in a close-up cut: calm, eyes forward, breathing controlled enough that it almost looked optional.

"Or lack of one, I suppose."

"Yeah," she nodded. "Does she always run like that?"

"Mostly," her trainer said. "It's her style. Runaway frontrunning."

Runaway.

Merry repeated it internally, turning the word over in her mind until it no longer felt unfamiliar next to her own style of choice.

"I could do that," she decided at last.

Her trainer paused for just a second before answering, giving her a discerning eye. "You could..."

"...But?"

"You run differently."

"That's not an answer." She pouted.

"It is," he said gently. "You're a natural frontrunner, Merry. You like to take an early lead and build on it down the stretch. Shirogane‐san pushes the front from the beginning, there's a difference."

Merry's eyes stayed on the screen. On Shirogane, still unmoving in victory footage that felt too calm to be real.

"I can push the front," she insisted.

"I know you can."

There was a pause before she spoke again, quieter this time.

"If she can do it at that speed… then I should be able to do it better. I'm faster than her."

Her trainer exhaled through his nose, not quite a sigh, but close. "Be careful with comparisons like that. You're only looking at one side of her style. She's built her entire approach around—"

But Merry wasn't really listening anymore, something had already shifted its weight inside her mind. She watched Shirogane cross the line one more time, silver hair settling as she stood a little ways past the post, the nearest runner barely crossing the two hundred meter mark nearly a distance behind her.

Her fingers tightened around the edge of the desk.

Her trainer noticed.

"You're doing it again," he said.

"Doing what?"

"Watching someone else and trying to run their race."

He picked up the remote and froze the screen mid-stride.

Shirogane's form remained maddeningly unchanged even stationary.

"I'll be frank with you, Merry, I don't entirely like what I'm seeing."

She blinked. "You don't?"

"I respect it," he corrected. "I'm even a little scared of it, but that's beside the point."

He gestured at the screen.

"No late-race fatigue. Hardly any wasted motion. No panic response when challenged. She runs at a runaway pace and somehow finishes composed. That is not normal."

Merry glanced back at the image.

"It looks effective."

"It looks expensive," he said dryly, ticking off points on his fingers. "In training, in conditioning, in strain. And we have no idea what kind of workload supports it."

He set the remote down on the desk between them and sat down opposite her.

"For all we know, she's built years of stamina around that style. Maybe she's gambling soundness for results. Or perhaps she's simply exceptional."

He met her eyes directly.

"But copying results without understanding the process behind them is how runners break themselves."

Merry said nothing.

Her gaze drifted back to the paused image of Shirogane.

"…So you're saying I shouldn't try."

"I'm saying you shouldn't imitate something you don't understand."

He let that sit for a moment.

"Besides, you already have strengths she doesn't. Better top speed and acceleration, for one. Do you think you could accelerate like you did in your most recent race if you ran the whole thing like her?"

She shook her head.

"Exactly," His tone softened slightly. "So don't lose what already works for you. Just run your race."

A long silence followed before Merry exhaled through her nose and nodded once.

"...Alright. I'll run my race."

Some of the tension left his shoulders.

"Good," he said, reaching for the registration papers beside him and sliding one free. "There's one more thing."

He set the paper down between them.

"She's entered the same race we were planning for."

"What?"





The gates sprang open and Merry broke cleanly.

Relief flashed through her in the same instant as motion, she hadn't stumbled or hesitated, and she settled into her opening routine almost immediately, driving forward for a few strong steps before easing into the position she had been trained to hold. The pack gathered around her in a familiar storm of hoofbeats and breath, everything was unfolding exactly as it should.

The rail slid past in smooth white segments. Turf flicked lightly against her calves from runners behind. She stayed with the lead group without forcing anything, shoulders low, cadence even, conserving what she could while keeping herself where she needed to be.

For the first hundred metres, the race made sense.

Pressure at her flank. Another runner half a length outside. Someone tucked behind her shoulder, waiting for an opening. The familiar dance of positioning and patience she'd experienced countless times in practice.

Then she saw it. Shirogane had moved ahead, clear of the lead group.

Not abruptly, like with a breakaway born of effort or risk, but gradually; she hadn't stopped accelerating even as the other runners had settled into their natural positions.

Merry had studied this. She knew the explanation. She had accepted it as a viable strategy.

And yet seeing it now, without meaning to, she found herself thinking: something about this is wrong!

No frontrunner should be doing that unless she was prepared to pay for it later, or believed she wouldn't. That was common sense.

Shirogane looked as though she hadn't spent a thing.

Her stride remained even, as if the idea of fatigue had not yet occurred to her. She continued to hold the same rhythm as the gap behind her widened again, then again, until what had begun as an aggressive move simply became the new structure of the race.

Merry forced her attention back to her own running.

Do not chase. Run your race.

Her trainer's voice was clear in her mind now, sharper than the crowd, sharper than instinct.

Run your race.

So she did. She kept position within the lead group, resisting the urge to respond as others around her began to lose their composure under the pressure of Shirogane's pace. One by one they stretched, then slipped backward, the field thinning as the front resolved itself into something far simpler:

Distance.

By the time they reached the far turn, Shirogane was still extending away.

Merry could feel the strain building now, not from panic but from awareness. The race was continuing forward without her permission, and yet she remained exactly where she had been instructed to stay. Every instinct that urged her to respond was met with something steadier, more deliberate.

Discipline.

Not yet. Final leg. Follow the plan.

The straight approached, and Merry shifted. She gathered everything she had been preserving, every reserve carefully held back for this moment. Her breathing tightened, her stride lengthened, and the world narrowed into a single line of pursuit.

She detonated.

The turf practically broke beneath her, each step carrying more power than the last and sending clods of turf flying in her wake. The gap to Shirogane began to shrink, slowly at first, then all at once as Merry committed fully to the run she had prepared for.

Five lengths.

Three.

A length and a half.

For a brief moment, it felt as though the calculation had been correct, as though the plan was finally resolving itself into reality.

Then something changed.

Not in Shirogane, but in Merry.

It felt like a switch had flipped and all of a sudden, her legs burned and breathing felt impossible. Each breath came shallower than the last, each stride costing more than it should have, not because anything ahead had changed, but because she had reached the boundary of what she could sustain.

The gap stopped closing.

Then it held.

Then it began to widen.

Merry pushed harder, searching for something beyond the limit she was already standing inside, but there was nothing left to take. The race did not slow. The distance did not yield. It simply slipped out of her control.

One length.

One and a half.

Two.

The final straight blurred around her as willpower melted into desperation and raw animal instinct. She kept running because there was nothing else to do, because stopping was not part of her nature, because the line still existed even if the outcome had already been decided.

Shirogane crossed first.

Seven lengths later, Merry Soon crossed second.





Seven.

Merry kept thinking of it even after she had left the track. Her trainer spoke, doors opened and closed, people moved around her, but the number stayed where it was.

Seven lengths.

It sounded harmless, almost innocent when spoken aloud, like a measurement from someone else's life. But on the television screen in the office, it looked like a guilty verdict.

The race footage froze at the finish line.

First.

Seven lengths.

Second.

Merry stood in front of the television, towel still draped over her shoulders, hair damp against her neck. She watched herself cross the line again. Not first, not even close enough for comfort. Behind her, the field resolved into shapes that no longer mattered. Ahead, only one figure remained clear.

"—and Shirogane Oruzeru extends her lead decisively in the final stretch! A commanding finish!"

The announcer's voice cut through the replay loop, unchanged from the moment it had been recorded.

Merry frowned slightly at that. Commanding felt too small a word for what it had been.

Her trainer stood a few steps behind her, arms crossed. "You ran well," he said.

Merry didn't answer immediately. On screen, she saw herself again: straining now, shoulders rising, stride shortening in the final meters. Not collapsing, but no longer gaining.

Just… staying.

"I didn't win," she said at last, deflated. "I couldn't."

"No," he agreed carefully, turning the television off. "You didn't, but you ran it right."

Merry replayed the finish in her head without the screen now. The moment she had tried to close the gap and found that the gap did not respond.

Silence followed before Merry finally turned her head slightly.

"She didn't even—" She stopped, searching for the right word. "She wasn't even tired."

Her trainer folded his arms. "No… She wasn't."

That sentence made something ugly tighten in her chest.

"I waited," Merry said slowly, almost to herself. "I ran my race. I trained hard. I did what we planned."

"You did."

Her brow furrowed. "Then why did it feel like it was over before the final straight?"

He didn't answer immediately, but Merry could see the gears turning in his head. It didn't matter what he had to say, the plan had been right. It had to have been right, she'd gotten too close for it to be wrong.

If it hadn't worked then something in her hadn't been enough, and she wouldn't let him soften the blow.

Her gaze dropped briefly to her hands. "I can do better than that," she said. "I know I can."

His expression shifted into something softer. "You ran your personal best out there."

"I know."

"That matters."

She looked back up at the empty screen.

Seven lengths.

"It doesn't feel like it," Merry said quietly. "She ran like I wasn't even there."

Her trainer exhaled through his nose. "That's one way of looking at it."

Merry turned the monitor on again, watching the final straight for the third time. Her own figure entered the frame later than she remembered, smaller than she remembered, working harder than she remembered.

"I was closing."

He nodded.

"But it wasn't enough."

Silence settled again. Her trainer didn't speak, and Merry didn't ask him to.

Seven lengths wasn't close. Not at all.

Merry turned away from the screen. For a moment, she didn't speak, the replay clicking softly behind her as it reset once more.

"I'll catch her."

Her trainer's eyes sharpened. "Merry—"

"I will," she said, pulling the towel from her shoulders, twisting it once in her hands as though something in her might come loose with the water. "Next time I'll catch her."





AN: I haven't written anything in a while, so forgive the herky-jerky pacing. While I was inspired enough by all the discussion on the possible different rival dynamics to write something, I was too lazy to write any connecting scenes or to add in a training montage. Also, if you haven't guessed already, the name Merry Soon is supposed to be as close to Mary Sue as possible while still sounding somewhat like a racehorse name, but she's eh... missing her usual religious zeal cause I couldn't figure out how to work it in, so I just made it an obsession with facing Shirogane in every race, which kinda mirrors how Mary Sue acted in Youjo Senki if you squint and do some mental acrobatics.
 
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Good stuff!

Even setting aside the Mary Sioux aspect, this is greatly enjoyable as another outside perspective on Shiro, on what other racers feel when confronted with her unnatural stamina and brutal pace. Not the fastest racer, no, but she doesn't have to be. She just has to make sure your top speed can't close the gap.

I once again wonder how many Orzel imitators we'll see out there. How many will break or nearly kill themselves, chasing the tailwind of that eagle. I'm also wondering if there's any talk shows in Uma that might be featured in an interlude of some kind, doing a breakdown on Orzel's strategy and exceptionally good health.
 

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