Questionable Questing

I'm on chapter 15, so right when Madison's being introduced. So far I am liking it, I have a special interest in incestous stories, and I do like the fact that you're doing more than making it smut. The general changes Danny's making to the Bay are pretty good to make it less of a gangland for sure.

Salacious_Sovereign

I personally think Sophia gets too much focus, but that's the most subjective take I have on it for damn sure, your use of her makes perfect sense and works well for the story.

Taylor as a spitfire "right-hand daughter" to Danny is great too, I like her as sort of his personal assistant role.

Salacious_Sovereign

The only real critique is just that honestly I don't think you've gone far enough with the sex scenes, at least for the amount of build-up they've had. They feel too short and cut off, and especially for how little Taylor/Danny content has been shown so far, what with them being essentially the "main" couple here.

Salacious_Sovereign

See those two as opposed to Sophia and Emma who have had a decent amount of scenes of their own, while Taylor's only had one I think. I will admit that you've said a few times that they don't get much alone time now, so that's understandable, just disappointing.

Salacious_Sovereign

Overall it's really good though, and it's given me my own ideas for Master DannyXTaylor stuff in the future. I'll keep reading the rest of what you have out and watch the thread for more down the line.

Jackalmoreau

So I think you'll dig it. We get more sex, and at least a few more good Danny/Taylor scenes. At the time I was worried that I flat out couldn't delay sex payoffs, so Do It was an experiment in narrative patience. All my stuff is incest heavy so I'd love to hear your thoughts on anything else you read of mine.

Salacious_Sovereign

Cool, I'll check out your other things later when I've caught up with 'Do It For Her' then, and that's understandable about the early experimentation. I certainly had some of that myself.