Questionable Questing

Bob is bob

Serious work man, can't do a romance with her son.
Money, taking over their trade routes and cultivated controlled Wyld land for crops and minerals for magical enchantment.

Bob is bob

And the master of the city state that wants to conquer them was friends with a previous Ascendent leader of that city state who was betrayed by other members of her city, breaking his bond of loyalty to that city and now he sees no problem in conquering it

Andy333

I like that, a little bit less black and white. make the whole endeavor a lot more personal and will help explain why the conspiracy keeps going at it even after they face a couple set backs or get caught. Its gives the villian more motivations than money or greed.

Bob is bob

You have no idea bruh. Want to quick read something of mine? I am not a good vs bad guy writer. I am everyone will suffer heroically writer

Andy333

Sure, I would love to read your stuff. My stomach's kind of hurting right now, so I'm take some meds and go to bed early, but tomorrow's going to be a pretty chill day probably so I'll have plenty of time to give feed back and idea's.

Bob is bob

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1jrShj2cFcpJW1k89kzK5QpcW3n5YV4crbi-YRXLFFiw/edit?usp=sharing Say what you like but feel free to critique strongly

Bob is bob

Give it a go and how your day?

Andy333

Its been pretty chill. Worked on Queen Mother a lot. Just got back from Church's chicken and they are so much better than KFC, highly recommend. How's your day been?

Bob is bob

Not bad. Doing some editing and working on Warcraft AU with friend. How are your projects and what you dislike in a lot of porn stories?

Andy333

I'm actually having a lot of fun rereading some of my old work, so I can remember where I was at and the plot points going on since its been so long. I can see a lot of area's I want to improve now, but its still pretty cool. I don't know if this sounds arrogant, but just being able to say people like my work makes me feel good.

Andy333

And one thing I really dislike in porn stories is when powers sound more likes a check list or really technical and not something someone actually has and is having fun with. Its like I read a dc comic's fic where the over power protagonist has telekinisis and he describes in detail how many pounds of force he can pick up,

Andy333

But you never see him experimenting or having fun with it. Its like having the mc cook something and using his powers so he doesn't have to go across the kitchen to the drawer to pick up some ingredient, that's a great way to make the power and the character feel real. You're character is not restricted to only using powers during fights scenes.

Bob is bob

You still want to redo Miss Dallion? And give that google docs link a go and tell me what you think good and bad

Bob is bob

Those kinds of fics make me fucking hate the writer

Andy333

I do want to redo Miss Dallon, but I want to finish it first since the redo is going to change so much it'll be almost a different story.

Bob is bob

You like the evil greg as best buddy and dragon to Amy idea?

Andy333

But yeah nothing more infuriating than wasted potential. I've seen to many authers come up with a cool power or take an intresting piece of lore from canon and use it to make something really cool, and they base their story off the power itself and not using that power to make the characters more interesting.

Andy333

I do like the idea of having the corrupter as a friend instead of a unseen threat, but I still haven't decided if I'll keep Greg or maybe go with my original idea or something else.

Bob is bob

Could do a OC which lets you avoid the baggage of how much people hate Greg.

Bob is bob

I hate settings with stats and fucking numbers. I am not here to read math class.