Questionable Questing

What trouble?

You said you didn't like first chapter result

2 very devoted daughters.

Oh, I thought we already talked about this a couple times. I rushed in too quickly and didn't give enough focuses to the action, emotion, or world building needed for a satisfying first chapter.

I like Charlie best. Would you have a story where Charlie or Lucifer is protag

Charlie is the best girl. If I do any Hazbin idea, she is either going to be the MC or the main love interest.

One of my favorite pictures of her.

I sleep and I love her smile in the pregnancy one

But when Hazbin first came out, and I saw the pilot on Youtube not Amazon, I had this idea of Charlie getting summoned by some random cult in some sort of death world like 40k or even remenet, and in-between trying to build a thriving town and protect her people from monstrous hordes out of a couple of crazy cultist and a shack or two.

She has to deal with how the more they worship her, the more her body and mind seem to be changing to suit what they want. But sleep well, we will talk more tomorrow.

Talk about this more tonight and milfs being corrupted into incest

Charlie's personality is perfect. I love her base character. The but here is that personality while great, it doesn't have any bits from being the princess of hell. Its not adapted to her social circumstances and upbringing. Which is a loss of potential in my view but I want more fantasy drama and less tumbler oc broadway from Hazbin

I kind of like the idea that a younger version of Charlie was a little colder and more formal, her falling back onto her parents training to cover up her own awkwardness and insecurities. But as she got stuck on the idea of redeeming hell, and secretly fulfilling her desire to see her family fixed, she had to specifically teach herself how to open up and willingly allow herself to get embarrassed.

I just really love the idea that she used to be the scary ice queen princess but once she learned nobody liked her and that she had no real friends,that was that big push that caused her to embrace being happy all the time and reject all the social games her mom or dad played.

Gives her a tiny bit of a edge while having her remain mostly pure as can be. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mYqq239SKdM I really like things like this that point out she is a natural born arch demon

I love the way her aura or soul, whatever, was trailing around her and caressing Alabaster neck when she threatened him. I love when magic is treated like magic and can play fast and loose with certain physical rules.

I like the idea of Charlie's soul being this monstrous figure of fire and shadow, beautiful but terrible. Vaggie too was fucked over. She's a demon slaying fallen angel and nothing is done with this. Absolutely no badass rage montage when Charlie is hurt or threatened. Fuck it. Vaggie should have been going berserk on Adam after he bled Charlie

What we should've had.

Vaggie the demon slayer. But for Charlie, have Lucifer and Lilith love her but for Lucifer, some bits from canon are fine but pilot Lucifer was menacing. Fanon Lucifer can be too edgy but in those edges are pieces of gold. A powerful dominating king of Hell trying to force it into a hedonistic heaven in a statement against god, doing this project in his Pride Ring of favorite sinners since the dawn of time

He just needs a hint of Makima, if you know what I mean. He genuinely loves Charlies and wants the best for her, but he's not above manipulating her for his own goals or because he thinks he knows what's best for her, Kind of mirror his relationship with his brothers in that way, where eventually Charlie will reach her breaking point with him and have to decide if she oppose him or not.