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Actually, I just checked the first chapter and saw that you fixed that too. It reads much better now as well.
You're a new poster here so you may get more attention to this story if you talk more in other threads. You may also want to place a working link to this story in your signature.
Today I learned that "Blinding pain" is not just a metaphor. Turns out you really can be in too much pain to see, and have actual darkness in your entire field of view. Additionally, ringing in the ears and feeling like I'm wearing earplugs.
My ankle is about as sprained as it's possible to...
The original Han Wei section and your dialogue shows you can do it. You can even do it really well! Just gotta not mix up intelligence with a bad chatbot's impression of logic.
As some advice, people tend to think like they speak.
A notable improvement over the last chapter, but you're still leaning too hard into the logical computer nerd side of things and not hard enough into the actually-a-person side of things.
There's a few too many and some of them are more than a bit of a stretch. I've certainly never thought "Database mismatch," when things go strange.
That's really the only noticeable nitpick I had to make.
A bit too heavy on strange analogies. For example, "Memory slammed into him like a corrupted data packet forcing its way through a firewall."
Otherwise this has potential, and you've made some pretty good detailed descriptions.
Imagine trying to train your probably sfw AI in writing with a porn website. The number of guests is still going up and they're looking at profiles too.