I think Buzz might have miscounted.
You still don't have Sophia getting any actual formal punishment. There also isn't any mechanism in place to prevent Sophia from committing crimes anywhere but school. How would they know if Sophia start beating the shit out of people who can't fight back in her spare time. Give her an ankle bracelet* (or less noticeable tinker standing) and some sort of in house punishment (console duty, pay cut, whatever the PRT uses for minor offenses). It doesn't need to be a new section or anything just piggot laying down the law for a couple lines.
The word soonest doesn't fit grammatically. The ending est implies there are other things that are soon and this thing would be the most soon. A better fit would be immediately or as soon as possible.
As I recall, Piggot hammered them mainly for going in without authorisation, and for the damage. She cared not at all about the money (and, by extension, the Undersiders getting away).
I've seen 'soonest' as military speak
That is true. The important part is that she is very willing to punish and yell for minor transgressions that are a result of good intentions and lack of training. She should be willing to go farther for actual malice, and that she has the ability to punish wards without getting the courts involved. There are things they can do to Sophia without arresting her as long as Taylor is willing to go along with the mercy.
Such as?
Oh Sorry! I missed that paragraph when I went through it again.
Maybe, maybe not. Depends on inspiration.
While I liked the first versions just fine, the new ones are excellent. Awesome job.
That works for Worm, too, actually.
I think The Rise of Bakuda has a more poetic sound to it.
" ... and Bakuda explodes once more on to the scene ... "
PHO: "Well we all know that Buzz is the dominant one, I mean she orders Stalker around all the time, and Stalker never does anything about it...Who know Stalker had such a....submissive personality."
The Bakuda Strikes Back?
Eh, they were chatty little cuddle-buddies for the first four chapters, it doesn't seem like that much of a stretch.
"And Bakuda explodes once more on to the scene," mumbled the mad bomber. Bakuda pushed up from the floorboards and took stock of herself: All ten fingers? Check. Armed? Check. Dangerous? Check. Sexy? Double-check.
OK, skimmed the first for chapters for Panacea stuff, since I actually forgot about most of their interaction then.
.... what?
But I changed it anyway. Just to get it done with.
I got that it wasn't sexual (I probably should have worded that last post a little better), what it was was more affectionate than Taylor knows how to be... To someone who was basically an acquaintance, leaning towards friend (not really close... yet).
Sorry if I caused you to "rage edit"
. Thanks.
What? No! Augh.
Well, maybe. But I liked it anyway.
