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Blonddude42 said:
Thoughts on reread -- the MC is an unreliable narrator in a way I don't think I've really seen. She doesn't lie to herself or misattribute the actions of others (which is what I expect with unreliable narrators), but rather she outright doesn't think of some actions until 'Malcom' references something she has done or is planning on doing.
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I try to hint as to these things, but that is intentional. The idea, more or less, is to reflect the fact that she's doing these things in a way that most people wouldn't pick up on and the best way to reflect that is to even mostly conceal it from the reader. Though, again, I am attempting to put in hints as to what's happened; as well as doing my best to never contradict the truth. Merely... Omit it.
 
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Then he did look over at me. His expression was… Strangely sympathetic. "I tell you this because I do not want you to feel responsible for her death. Whoever she is, you could not have saved her. Do you understand?" I nodded, slowly, and only then did he look away and start driving again.

"I have told them what we want the body for. That is why you must come. Someone will examine you. It may not be a woman. It should be no more invasive than a simple fitting; they should not need to lay a finger on you to take your measurements. If they do then inform me." He didn't say why, or what he'd do, and she wasn't especially reassured. Thanks to her mother there had been… A lot of fittings. None of them had been what she'd call 'uninvasive'.
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@TotalAbsolutism: Everything in this chapter up to and including the first of the two quoted paragraphs is in first person, while the second paragraph through the rest of the chapter suddenly switches to third.
 
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