Crossposted from SV and FF.
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Sipping my cup of hot cocoa at my desk, I...
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While I like the premise, right out of the gate there are problems with the constant pov shiftting in certain chapters making it borderline unreadable as well as the zalgo text drawling me out of the story
But the story itself is good just not the pov
Hey I really like it. I like the POV switches too because I really enjoy seeing things from other characters perspectives. Can't wait til Taylor fucks up with the command seals, just seems like something she'll do. I like the incomprehensible text thinkers get when looking at him, is it a case of being able to get some some details out of it by focusing more and dealing with the headaches ? Either way it's better than seeing nothing at all and Wayne better than working perfectly fine because it's such an out of context problem.
Cant wait for a fight between an Endbringer although that would be pretty hard to write I'd imagine. Someone high in the PRT so contessa is Able to see Achilles or just Taylor? Or just some data about them, that makes Taylor a Hero not mistaken for a villain and hopefully they keep away from the undersiders or at least don't not join up.
I'm glad that he's not just an SI with all Achilles powers without the memories and instincts to go with it.
Thanks for writing this it's been pretty enjoyable.
Hey im not saying a story from multiple veiwpoints is bad but I am saying swotching pov 7 times in one chapter Is
Yeah, it's a shame that the fic I linked never got finished, but I'm planning on finishing this through. And don't worry, the reactions will happen eventually.Can't wait for the eventual freak out when they find out who he is. The story you linked as inspiration ended on Piggot finding out and we never got any reaction chapters where they try to explain. No pressure to get there quickly and thanks for the chapter.
My bad, I posted the unrevised version from my gdrive instead of crossposting the edited SV version. It should make more sense now.I wonder what he told her, and why she decided to respond publicly.. It looks as though he PM'd Dragon and she decided to respond in the open forum rather than in private.. Odd.
Robed your trials are my amusementAs hilarious as this is, I have yet to come across a story where we got lewd Canary or even a Canary ship that resulted in lewds. Here's to hoping.