Questionable Questing

A offensive spider sense. That self destructive nature of the Viltrumites having the ultimate attack mind and senses but not for defense.

And bat girls, what chi powers they got and what makes them want to let go of that for Viltrumtie enhancements?

Those sense also push for attack unconsciously in Viltrum's head, causing all sorts of other issues and in some cases almost acting as a berserk button. And for the Bat Girl, Cass I'm still debating, but Stephanie and Barbara its the power mostly. They get their ass kicked just sparring with Mark. When Viltrum comes they want to help and they can't with their current skill set.

Oh and did you read the incest snippet I made?

I have not yet but will after wrestling.

So Mark has this berserker wrath he's been avoiding for the early phase of the story. Then the second invasion happens and he loses control and becomes a unleashed young Viltrumite in a life or death situation where he needs every bit of power from his rage and instincts to save his team and sisters.

So what kind of viltrumite enhancements for Barbara and Stephaine?

". Her figure was much leaner and skinnier than her sisters. But the way her cantaloupe sized breasts started to sag from their weight and her hips kept widening was a reminder that no matter how many salads she choked down or crunches she did, she was still getting older."

Very nice and I will say you are crunching a lot of thought flow into these paragraphs and it makes for messy and rushed work. But I like the characterization of hte sisters and the teasing between Mari and his mom

It was a very rough draft and I was trying to keep the word count down while trying to fit in a decent chunk of exposition, so like you said lots of crunchy sentences.

Honestly it would work a lot better if I had done the intro I had planned in the beginning, but again that would've added another couple paragraphs and for a snippet I think I was already kind of pushing it with the size.

Invincible focus. One project dedicated at a time.

I will say that magical girl world is perfect for Mister Dallion

I did once upon a time have the idea of a magical girl Worm crossover, with Vista and Taylor as the younger generation and the Dallon's being older, retired magical girls turned mentors. Didn't really go anywhere since a interesting concept doesn't make a good story, but still kind of funny that you mentioned that.

Insert Mister Dallion into the two sister mom dynamic you have here but back to Invincible. What are the viltrumite enhancements for Barbara and Stephaine and what is the interaction like between Barbara and Mark before the second invasion when they are super heroing?

Their close childhood friends and Mark had a crush on her awhile back that she didn't reciprocate. They were a couple years apart in age which isn't a big deal now, but when your twelve or fifteen is like a million years. But since they never hooked up like She did with Dick, there's no lingering tension or any complicated feelings just friend that respect each other.

Mark's pretty chill and relaxed and since he's one of the few people who was able to completely stay out of the whole Jason drama without taking a side, he's a welcome comfort zone for Barbra and Stephine since he's totally devoid of drama and is kind of a neutral zone for the Batfamily. Bruce usually try's to go through Mark if he wants to talk with Jason about non-work stuff.

Sparring buddies and always hung out and played games and shared other hobbies

There's a irony here they think Mark is chill when his bloodline is war and conquest given flesh

Although ever since Mark's got his powers it's been changing his dynamic with Barbra in particular. Since she's used to be the senior hero that everyone looks up to and everyone turns to for a plan, and now Mark is now getting more confident and a lot stronger is unknowingly making her feel kind of useless and is pushing that button of her's that never fully healed when Dick cheated on her.

Creating tension leading to arguing leading to bursting on Dick and Mark thinking again of dating her

And pushing her to get Viltrum enhancements after a talk and push from Debbie. Kind of showing her corruption in how she's pushing other girls into it.