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Worst of all, people applauded her for it. She was a self-confessed serial killer, yet among the ordinary citizenry of Brockton Bay, she had an actual fan club, and more people on top of that who simply approved of what she was doing. (Well, in fairness, she had taken out the Nine … and Butcher and the Teeth … and several other capes who had been perennial thorns in Emily's side … but that shouldn't matter. Murder was still murder.)
(also, it's kinda icky how Piggot uses "but they ran away" as one of her primary reasons to dislike capes, when Endbringer battles are a thing, where capes knowingly walk into near-certain death to fight godlike monsters)
Now Taylor, that's just asking for Mr. Murphy to send someone even stupider than Bastard Son, who will probably annoy you even more.
He was watching the crowd, enjoying their reactions, and giving the monologue mostly on autopilot.Wooo! Awesome chapter! The only thing is that BS continuing talking while Taylor beats up all of his guys seems unrealistic, even with how quickly it would have taken.
"Not really," Atropos observed from the kitchen doorway. "But I was thinking we could go down to the Boardwalk next Saturday. The Brockton Bay Rogues' Guild will be putting on a show there from about one onward, every weekend from now on."
He was watching the crowd, enjoying their reactions, and giving the monologue mostly on autopilot.
Originally I was going to have them show up, but decided to cut that. Good catch.Fun chapter, as always.
It seems like at the start of the scene Atropos is talking about the coming Saturday, and by the end of the scene she's talking about today?
He had a more or less prepared speech, which he was delivering partly to her and partly to the crowd. What he could see of the fight was a bunch of his guys crowding around and obscuring his view of Atropos (because she's not any taller than them).That wasn't clear. I had the same reaction that the other poster did, that he was talking to Taylor and would've interrupted himself once the action started. If you intended for him to be facing away and watching the crowd, it didn't come through in the text. It felt mildly unrealistic to me as well the way it was written.
He had a more or less prepared speech, which he was delivering partly to her and partly to the crowd. What he could see of the fight was a bunch of his guys crowding around and obscuring his view of Atropos (because she's not any taller than them).
And the fight went fast. By the time his conscious mind registered that what he absolutely knew was going to happen was not, in fact, happening, he'd just about finished his speech. His brain had given the orders and his mouth finished saying the words.
Sometimes it takes a few seconds to realise that what you expect to happen is not, in fact, happening.
I'm going to add one more visual aspect, that he's turning in a slow circle as he monologues, fully expecting Taylor to be down and/or dead by the time he's facing front again.That's fine, and to you that makes sense, but to at least two readers it felt off. We didn't see what you intended us to see. It wasn't enough to make a huge deal out of it, so I didn't say anything until another reader did, and then I backed them up. What you saw in your head isn't what I saw in mine when I read it. Or at least, it didn't make sense to me as it did to you because something felt like it was missing.
I'm going to add one more visual aspect, that he's turning in a slow circle as he monologues, fully expecting Taylor to be down and/or dead by the time he's facing front again.
Awesome sauceI think that would help a lot! That's the piece that was missing, and solves the whole situation.
There have been so many references to that song.Just caught up Awesome chapter!
*Sings*
"Carry on my bastard son, there'll be peace now you are do-ne"
Ah, that explains it. Never watched that show.It got entrenched in geek culture when Supernatural used it as their theme.
Miss Medic will be around.Eeeeeeeeeee what a delight, two updates in a single week. Fun ones too. As lil miss bagrat mentioned there's certainly a lot less murder going on but that doesn't make it any less enjoyable. In fact I'm quite fond of these little moments of character interaction. Though I'm curious to see if Miss Medic becomes relevant to any future Situations™.