Jaxus
Your first time is always over so quickly, isn't it?
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Copy from my comment from RR
TFTC. I'm going to go on a slight rant hopefully nothing too much and typing on a phone apologies for misspelling and repeating. Just wondering if we can get a chapter with spoiler tabs with each character and what faction/ alignment/ or connection they have in the story like others said before I can barely remember half of the people in this story and who exactly they represent. like I think we all know who the main crew is in the story and where they stand in revalence to Cam.
On to the review and questions. As others said the fights length and the commercial breaks may have been edited with a timeline so we know how much time has passed in the battles. We now know that the earlier battle with Mawl lasted 5 mins even in that amount of time he still could have teleported jumps to them . Yes, it is said that cam doesn't constantly think but at this time he still has the player's mind even though it's been nerfed by the powers that be, it still should be active to an extent. Not only that but he has so many force powers and future knowledge about ways force users have died. Just wondering has he forgotten about order 66, hk47, grievous, mandos, and even non force users have easily killed them with overwhelming fire.
Cam is in his mando armor and is sealed, he could have used rockets in close combat, concussion or multiple flash grenades. Hell add a strobe light to the flashlights with his help even in the daytime . I hate training with those. the electric shock, and gas/ darts were a neat thing but didn't he have blasters with his gauntlets that Bo helped him intergrade in chapters long ago and he doesn't think to use them. he did get a full set but if he didn't use his old gauntlets wouldn't it be a dishonor to both Bo and her family that made/ modified for him. Also why hasn't Cam implemented other weapon systems or gadgets other than the non lethal ones. For example if he doesn't want to teleport or phase give him a jetpack, I mean there have been enough times he needs to move fast it boggles my mind he doesn't have one. for other things look at boba, din, and other mando armor configurations. hell he's from earth and has possibly seen other movies. For example, Iron man the amount of weapons crammed into his suit is shocking. Cam could have tons of hidden weapons but idk why he doesn't use or seem to remember his past experiences for barely anything except some music and books. not only that but he still has the power of his inventory. In my opinion I would have abused that sooo much more than cam is and he rarely uses it strategy or ever now.
For example during the vong he was using the limited supplies that he had at the time with the guns and detonators. Now here he could have stashed tons of explosives or other consumables. hell instead of the gas in his gauntlets just use gas grenades to boom layer the whole area in gas when near the island. I don't remember if there are Geneva suggestions but if I remember right in the beginning of the story he said something like better to ask for forgiveness than for permission. other places like for Boba fett would be blasters around the limbs seeing as locking lightsabers with maul and then just start blasting either direct shots to limbs or if able to non critical areas or the lightsaber idk. Other than the regular he could possibly use the stun shot or even ion and try to depower or shut off Mauls lightsaber. I'm just wondering so much because as you said he was a soldier in his previous life but we rarely see any of this in his person no morbid or crude jokes really i could see it if he was a green boot but, we all know he isn't or at least not green. ha's experienced in gorilla warfare or has faced it a bit as in with the Vong But doesn't really add up at times. I mean I get you are trying to keep him paper thin at times so people can imagine themselves in the battle as him but its not like the commando games or halo we are seeing and breathing in the world of the character povs
. I do like the story and know that It's probably long past renditions and edits for who knows how long and take all I'm saying with a grain of salt because I don't remember everything that I've seen/read/ and played and probably get things messed up and twisted. may have more to add ect ect.
PS. Are we going to have to deal with an edge lord Anikan again but he falls to the dark side earlier because the Lokella are getting demolished finally by the huts or other people they have been pissing off.
PPS. If General Grievous is somewhat the same in this story how easy would it be if Cam started actually using his force powers for once in an actual fight other than for boosting his speed just wondering because its getting kind of ridiculous that he is barely using them against similar strength opponents.
(Edit.) Another thing I think people are upset about is that you have made a character that is equivalent to Starkiller. Cam essentially has all the powers Starkiller has but with more abilities and knowledge about the powers and setting. He might not be as strong as him but we all know how Cam can control his anger. for example with the Vong he compressed it and powered through the whole invasion and he wasn't as befuddled as he was here. Everyone, the Jedi and the people he's been near knows about it too. Even in the previous chapter he unleashes his black lightning and broadcasted it to everyone around, so what's stopping him from just powering through it like he's done already a couple of times.
PPPs. A lot of the comments I'm seeing and first time I went to the other sites are fucking hilarious. One thing I might say, just saying but some of the constructive criticism/ questioning may actually be helpful because with all the jumps in the story we barely have any idea what Cam is doing at times. Early in the story Cam did get stronger and learn as much as he can about the force and powers. Not only that the only thing we really know of him is that he is a 40 some year old that's quite compassionate. Those against the plan went on a patrol without support. And he, his friends and some random civs got wiped by some terrorists and probably sprung the whole cell to cause chaos somewhere else. Sure we know headstrong to and as stubborn as a mule at times, but he's also brain dead about his past experiences. He already knows that he forgets stuff, it's been said and explained to us multiple times throughout our experiences with Cam it gets aggravating to people.
It's like telling a person not to text or drink while driving and they still do it causing chaos and death all the time all over the world. And it leads to the same thing happening. In a way Cam is like what Voss said in Far cry 3. Even in his fight with Maul. He does the same thing over and over and just, barely ( Cam thinks) he won. While diverging a bit, Cam already knows not to fully trust the force nor the system he so desperately depends on all the time. Hell if I remember right the force and the system were at odds at times and his own system/ providers told him that he was relying on them to much so that were nerfing what he had because it was boring to them (forget exactly what the system said, not going to search for it at the moment).
Another thing just a thought that started nagging in my brain and won't go away. Seeing the comments and your responses. I'm not on patron nor discord, not enough floating cash and just got annoyed with the other. In the responses that you got aggravated at, someone may have said something like that in another comment/ form/ or thread and got the same response or aggravation and was either blocked or just banned because of the comment/ discussion they put through. And as an example other people would see that and try not to cause you stress because, in my case I'm relatively new here and binged through the story. And with great stories it gets passed along through other sights or word of mouth. Sure new people that binge or casually read might see something that conflicts with others but that is all apart of making great stories. You yourself have posted before in each chapter, "As always, thanks to those helping me write and plan out this story and checking it for continuity and logic errors." Others may see Cam's action as logic errors, but to you and the many others might see that its spick and span. while any opposition to that is hateful, wrong, condemning even
. And yes you and the others have all the right to be mad about someone questioning/ commenting/ or even finding inconsistencies with the story. It can sometimes show just how much they actually care about your work. Many others and I know that the people who pay get advanced chapters and see behind the seems info. We understand that the frame has already been set and the story is already in stone. But, if you didn't want any feedback or comments why even respond or acknowledge them in the things they are saying. I know writing can be stressful and there can be a serious burn out, but I think I can speak for everyone when I say that this is a great story and would hate to see it disappear.
Anyway until next time I see something to comment on or if a random thought just burrows into my brain that I can't get rid of.
To da loo
Alrighty, I'm just going to give you a bit of info.
1.All, if not the majority of Character info, is on the discord. There are way too many to list and edit for each of the sites, especially since they also have images associated with them. This effort is not worth replicating on all the other sites as it would take a lot of time. Dedicated fans can join the discord for the info.
2. Player's mind wouldn't have changed it and Cam still stumbles when exiting teleportation. . He's also in an active warzone so that likely would have killed him, be it teleporting into a blaster bolt barrage, a mine or into a shield array like he did in earlier chapters.
Just because he has the ability doesn't mean he can use it at that moment reliably. Cam is not omnipotent.
His knowledge stems only from the films, Kotor and the clone wars.
He's not forgotten about any of that. Maul's no ordinary sith and he's taken into consideration that he stands to lose more if he involves others in his fight against a council level threat vs if he did it with Jedi support.
Maul's been intensely trained by Sidious since he was a small child to now at the age of 22.
He's been trained to kill Jedi masters at minimum and can kill Council level Jedi.
He's wiped out Anoon Bondara and Drallig, both of which had more experience than Cam does and would have provided a better challenge than an unarmoured Cam.
Never mind the fact Maul killed Drallig and took Serra out of the fight as the bare minimum of a warm up before facing Cam.
3. Try using the rocket or nades to be released before the opponent that is faster than you, at council level, lops off your head and other limbs before you can release them. The blaster bolts would have also shared a similar fate but instead reflected uselessly. Not using some of the built in equipment in the gear wouldn't have been a dishonour as the purpose of the armour is to protect it's user. It also makes no sense to go Iron Man when that would make things way heavier vs when you can wield the force.
4. see 2. Just because Cam was a soldier doesn't mean his entire life was dominated by it. Being a soldier fighting Maul would have gotten him killed here vs being a duellist. Being Spec Ops doesn't mean you instantly win the war and what you would have known then is practically standard or even outdated for soldiers in universe now.
5. Regarding PPS, current Cam would die. If Grievous ends up anything like his 2003 version and Cam tries to use the force on him, he'd be overwhelmed. Also, MAUL is NOT similar level. MAUL is COUNCIL LEVEL.
Regarding your edit, Cam is not Starkiller or even equivalent to him. Starkiller, like Maul, went through high intensity training from the get go to the point he could hunt targets like Shaak Ti who would be high Council level. Cam is actively looking to control or reduce his dark side abilities so it doesn't corrupt or control him. He also doesn't necessarily have more knowledge on force abilities other than what he has been exposed to.
Maul knows how to counter DS abilities to an extent so it would have been useless to try that against him.
6. Regarding the comments, USS has worked on this project for 5 years. He's been given so much shit for the effort he puts in for the work we all read and enjoy. There's a major difference between giving sound advice or constructive criticism vs just being a total jerk. Everyone appreciates decent advice but when it just becomes an echo chamber of hate or people not doing their due diligence, it gets tiring and stressful real fast especially when they go to their own communities or friend groups and decry him as "THAT author" and get the rest to raid and make abusive reviews on all his works. It's just not on, especially since he and the 2 others he works with to write this story with as much accuracy to the lore and with as much life as possible have given so much.
Hope this helps!