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DC Animated Universe: The RPG (Skyrim!Gamer SI/DCAU Crossover - Haremfic)

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Love the character you've made as well as his motivations, also the unique armor and name are a big plus. I'm eager to see his interactions with others and really really hoping he one day learns magic.
 
Your character gives off major sociopathic vibes, but considering you've written other antisocial pieces of crap it's no surprise you can't create a decent, relatable character to save your life. His inability to care about his parents, his arrogant and manipulative tendencies in dating, his belief that women should be subservient sex slaves to punish at will, and his complete failure to recognize himself as the problem—despite having a 100 in psychology—makes him come across as an immature teenager who never grew up.





As another reader pointed out, members of the Justice League have experienced profound losses—whether it's losing family members or even their entire species. This makes his sheer disregard for his parents even more jarring. Considering you specifically stated that his parents weren't abusive or bad in any way, the Justice League should be even angrier. One of the most common regrets people have is not treating their families better, not spending more time with them, or not appreciating them while they were still alive. Many would give anything for just one more day with a loved one. Just wait until you lose someone in your own family—you'll quickly learn to treasure them, even if your relationship wasn't perfect.





Unless you plan to give your protagonist a significant character arc, you might as well abandon any attempts to make him more likable.
 
Flippedhouse546 said:
One of the most common regrets people have is not treating their families better, not spending more time with them, or not appreciating them while they were still alive. Many would give anything for just one more day with a loved one. Just wait until you lose someone in your own family—you'll quickly learn to treasure them, even if your relationship wasn't perfect.
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Reviewing is one thing, but let's not project RL stuff here. That last line is especially feeling wrong to me and it feels as if you are saying something about the author here.
 
Kind of surprised this is in creative writing and not nsfw creative writing, given the content matter.
 
Idk how the content matters much it's a relationship preference not a direct sex scene, there are worse and more descriptive fics than this in the regular thread.
 
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DC Universe was primarily a science-fiction setting,
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I normally wait until I've read all current chapters to comment, but that was such an utterly hysterical thing to read I couldn't help myself. DC is hilariously overloaded with magic users. Zatanna, Wonder Woman, John Constantine, Raven, Dr. Fate, etc. Heck half of the villains in the universe are some flavor of supernatural. It's one of the, if not THE heaviest magic super hero universes I know of.
 
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I normally wait until I've read all current chapters to comment, but that was such an utterly hysterical thing to read I couldn't help myself. DC is hilariously overloaded with magic users. Zatanna, Wonder Woman, John Constantine, Raven, Dr. Fate, etc. Heck half of the villains in the universe are some flavor of supernatural. It's one of the, if not THE heaviest magic super hero universes I know of.
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Could be judging on the divide between tech/alien/lab accident powered stuff, and straight casters as opposed to the general magic power source heroes.

Or could just be way more familiar with tech etc powered capes in the setting than magic powered capes in the setting.

Personally I'd wager there's elements of both at play. Also lets be real for all that there are, in fact, many magic capes there's a metric ASS LOAD of things you'd call sci-fi.
 
I thought it was more pointing to the fact that magic in the DC verse is usually random shit and genetics instead of defined studies for the majority of people whereas science is both vastly widespread and pretty common on all levels of supernatural activity.

Hell Captain Cold and Mr.Freeze literally revolutionized refrigeration sciences and they're fucking street level.
 
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