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Bro... what the fuck is up with some of these drawbacks? You literally made sure that your MC is basically a sitting duck for the next week AND he's trouble magnet whose about to become wanted man. You, my friend, are one hell of a sadist lol.
 
Shaedy Hoe said:
Bro... what the fuck is up with some of these drawbacks? You literally made sure that your MC is basically a sitting duck for the next week AND he's trouble magnet whose about to become wanted man. You, my friend, are one hell of a sadist lol.
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True, like the fuck is he gonna do anyway? Even with his nifty ahh powers, there's no fucking way he's gonna survive his first day without something to help him do so.​
 
Anansi said:
True, like the fuck is he gonna do anyway? Even with his nifty ahh powers, there's no fucking way he's gonna survive his first day without something to help him do so.​
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Damn. He actually deleted the story. Now I feel bad for my critique cos I was actually interested in this story.😭
 
pingas plight said:
Wow, what was his set-up, and what world was he in where it was that dangerous?
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Worm SI as Shard. He did the CYAO with an OP build but then crippled himself with Drawbacks.

These Drawbacks include: He'd be extremely weak and soul sick for a week, his avatar has a disability (missing eye), he's wanted by everyone, he'll get damning evidence against him, get a kill order, trouble magnet, Endbringer magnet, can't have secret identity, can dimention hop for at least a decade, a stalker with an equally powerful cyoa build who really really hates him and is obsessed with him, a powerful gon be hella mad at him, Emma and Madison are powerful capes who are also wards (his avatar/host is a Winslow student), there would be 6 Endbringers active instead of just 3, he nerfed his anti master/thinker protections so precogs could path him, etc.

Even though his character is an OP Tinker and Trump with a great Thinker rating, he just won't be able to survive with how many Drawbacks he's given himself to make use of his powers especially with how bedridden He'd be on his fitst week.
 
Shaedy Hoe said:
Worm SI as Shard. He did the CYAO with an OP build but then crippled himself with Drawbacks.

These Drawbacks include: He'd be extremely weak and soul sick for a week, his avatar has a disability (missing eye), he's wanted by everyone, he'll get damning evidence against him, get a kill order, trouble magnet, Endbringer magnet, can't have secret identity, can dimention hop for at least a decade, a stalker with an equally powerful cyoa build who really really hates him and is obsessed with him, a powerful gon be hella mad at him, Emma and Madison are powerful capes who are also wards (his avatar/host is a Winslow student), there would be 6 Endbringers active instead of just 3, he nerfed his anti master/thinker protections so precogs could path him, etc.

Even though his character is an OP Tinker and Trump with a great Thinker rating, he just won't be able to survive with how many Drawbacks he's given himself to make use of his powers especially with how bedridden He'd be on his fitst week.
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Don't forget about that one drawback that made him cold as ice. It's not rocket science to know that this is essentially a very bad idea, especially when it comes to him planning to save Taylor, who, y'know, need someone to patch her up, among other things like gathering up allies, lessening a chance of his future team falling apart, etc.​
 
Anansi said:
Don't forget about that one drawback that made him cold as ice. It's not rocket science to know that this is essentially a very bad idea, especially when it comes to him planning to save Taylor, who, y'know, need someone to patch her up, among other things like gathering up allies, lessening a chance of his future team falling apart, etc.​
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Yup. He's basically fucked is what I'm saying.
 
Anansi said:
Rule Number One of using CYOA: If you're gonna give yourself or your character a drawback or two, make sure that they're not go beyond the line.
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He probably saw his build and "OP, Plz nerf" and then proceeded to cripple his MC, saw how alarmed the readers were and then deleted the whole thing, when all he shoulda was to make a few adjustments to the build to make the story more palatable. 😅
 
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