Down the rabbit hole
You now those 'oh shit' moments in life, like Kazuma meeting aqua or...
You now those 'oh shit' moments in life, like Kazuma meeting aqua or...
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Numach | 3 |
Yeah it is huhAren't Peak condition Martial arts and Cosmetic Shapeshift redundant if he drank essence of the warlord?
Interesting start.
Yeah yeah it would but I don't know who would do thatInteresting start.
Only a Merchant would try to mug someone wearing horns on their head.
I would, however, suggest getting a beta-reader. It would make it much easier to read.
Your grammar is a little bad. I volunteer my help for that.
The help would be greatly appreciated
Thanks for the compliment and I'm new so pacing is not a thing I'm good atHoly shit, are you sure you didn't take a Speed Force connection somewhere in that build? The rate you've moved through the "stations of canon" as they apply to SI into worm, especially CYOA variants is Insane. Impressive no doubt, but insanely fast. Still, despite being rough around the edges, looks interesting, and respect to the initiative to write/post.
thanks for the input, and i and my beta oniele shall stey ou damndest upon the next updateMy man OP-kun, ye need to look out fer yer spelling or them Spelling Nazis be out lookin' fer yer blood mate.
Also, you need to increase the length of each post, consolidate them into one large post if you want or write the next one long enough, more than exactly 1k words since anything less and people, like me, can and will take short posts like these as if you're just corresponding with your readers instead of you know, actually posting a chapter.
Redman turn and decks me with a right hook as I pull the trigger, grazing him this time
First, the term decking refers to punching someone so hard they fall over, not the punch itself. The classic modern example being the knockout game. You hit them and they hit the deck — usually stunned or unconscious. If you have been decked, you're not going to be standing, running or shooting a breath later.
Second, he's ridiculously eager to shoot cops in a place he has never been before. Is that typical of your normal day to day real life attitude, or is the SI not actually a self insert?
[QUOTE="Numach, post: 2585579, member: 29699"]dive into his guard and throw a punch at his throat.
Considering I don't really care if I die and see little to no value in life as is the extreme is a lack of empathyAgain said:powered armor[/I] when you do it. Powered armor that has a sturdy tinkertech alloy plate right where you're trying to punch. Powered armor that is immune to your tinkering specialty. Powered armor that lets him survive CQC with enemies like Lung and fucking LEVIATHAN. If you're lucky you'll just break your hand, brute rating and all. If you're not, he'll break the rest of you to match.
And if you do kill him, your next match will likely be the Triumvirate, and none of your powers will give you a snowball's chance in hell against Eidolon or Alexandria.