Handlewithcare
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I think a large and very enjoyable part of tech wank/uplift fics are the reactions of the people. When the protag comes along and upends centuries old beliefs and shatters their worldviews, that's when things get spicy 
That isn't really possible in this fic do to genius patrol and military secrecy.
Maybe she should have done the jump drive first and then a time skip to unveiling it to the public? Then show that the Vilani learn of it only years later because the voyage takes a while, terran travellers have stopped visiting, it made it's way up the bearaucracy and then they refused to believe primitives could build such a thing.
Finally they get confirmation. Cue panic, but by then Terra has already expanded massively away from them.
In the mean time the Protag has already developed new stuff that is now freaking out her own people.
That isn't really possible in this fic do to genius patrol and military secrecy.
Maybe she should have done the jump drive first and then a time skip to unveiling it to the public? Then show that the Vilani learn of it only years later because the voyage takes a while, terran travellers have stopped visiting, it made it's way up the bearaucracy and then they refused to believe primitives could build such a thing.
Finally they get confirmation. Cue panic, but by then Terra has already expanded massively away from them.
In the mean time the Protag has already developed new stuff that is now freaking out her own people.