Princess of Frozen Flowers
Book 1: Mountaineer Rebellion
Prologue
Dea's arms were shaking...
Book 1: Mountaineer Rebellion
Prologue
Dea's arms were shaking...
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Think you forgot to threadmark ch36, heh. Otherwise, pretty good chapters!
I am honestly not sure why this doesn't have more readers. Its certainly better written than quite a few other stories I have seen that are decently popular. Only thing that comes to mind is that its an original story. Are you posting this anywhere else? Scribble Hub seems to have a reader base that appreciates originals quite a bit more than this site, for instance. I don't have an account there, but I read a couple stories on it.
Anyway, thanks for the chapters!!!
Ehhhh, now that I have had some sleep, I can add a bit more to why I think most people on the internet and sites like this specifically aren't very interested: it reads like a fantasy novel. By that, I mean you have less of the instant gratification in every chapter that most webnovels and fanfics seem to.
There's probably a couple other reasons why it reads more like a novel to me than a webnovel, but the major one that I pick up on is the pacing of plot points. Not much that can be done about that with the style of book you are writing, lol. Its meant to be a journey with some climactic hills with a big climax at the end, not a series of moderate ones constantly.
Does that make sense? I might not be fully coherent yet, just woke up, lol. I think you have a great idea here, and while it does need refinement (I don't think anyone has ever written anything perfect on the first go), its definitely a very good start!
Edit: also don't read on SV much anymore cause they got super strict with everything, lol. Lost a LOT of good stories on there, but yours should be fine for that site. Is it doing any better there?
"It served us well." Crow agreed before looking back at the regal entrance. Arthur's flame barrier had begun to fade. There was a small army of mercenaries standing in wait on the other side. "I'll be on standby out here, to stay out of range of Frederick. If anything happens, I'll rush in."
Little Crow flew into the castle and perched up on the edge of one of the pane-less windows.
"Sounds good." Snow nodded and motioned to Lussuria. "Lussuria, lets go!"
"Right!"
Snow and Lussuria ran into the throne room, where a line of royal guard stood between them and the throne.