Hi all this is my first fanficion grammar fixes and opinions welcome.
This is a OC slight gamer...
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I gotta say this.... "ANXIETY" why would you write in that type of first person view.
It just doesn't click well since it feels like your bouncing to different plot points with no reference or journey.
Kitty as far as i know lives in the south-east as far as I know, and she somehow popped into New York? No questions on how a 14 year-old crossed multiple state-lines?
Really just needs a re-work and plenty of filler to account for travel otherwise you might as well have given teleport powers so that the transition made since.