Pef
I Am One
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Hey author.
I have a few things with your story.
While I get this is a 'slice of life' thing, the pace is far too slow, especially for such someone at low levels as Erik.
If he is cultivating so slow at a low level, how could he possibly get to Sage or Arcane, not to mention Master level ?
The incongruence is jarring, for someone described as best genius of the ages.
Also, if you post this on QQ, you can also give your readers something saucy to read, not just vivid descriptions of virgin goddesses.
I have a few things with your story.
While I get this is a 'slice of life' thing, the pace is far too slow, especially for such someone at low levels as Erik.
If he is cultivating so slow at a low level, how could he possibly get to Sage or Arcane, not to mention Master level ?
The incongruence is jarring, for someone described as best genius of the ages.
Also, if you post this on QQ, you can also give your readers something saucy to read, not just vivid descriptions of virgin goddesses.