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Welcome to Utopia: Book One of the Utopian Dreams Series

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A little explanation is in order. I have written a novel; the aforementioned Welcome to Utopia...
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    A little explanation is in order. I have written a novel; the aforementioned Welcome to Utopia.

    UPDATE: It has been published. Link to get it is here.

    [Or go on to Amazon and type in "Welcome to Utopia Alan Atkinson".]

    UPDATE TO UPDATE: I've decided to remove the free copy in the lead-up to publishing the sequel.

    Sorry, but if you haven't read it yet, you're just going to have to buy it and see what it's about.
     
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    • I think it might need a little more spacing.


    Outside that, I'll wait. I can't quite judge it yet, there's not enough.
     
    Ack said:
    I am trying to give it spacing. It is not cooperating.

    And yes, it's the first prologue of a 500-page book.
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    It does have that "Prologue" feel.


    Good luck with the formating. Hope you can beat it into submission.
     
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    Worked up teen is teen-ish.

    Now with powerarmor!
     
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    He really is chickenshit.

    Stephan's a manipulative dick, though.


    Not sure I like either of them, really.


    Have to wait and see, I guess. There's certainly potential.
     
    Stephen is a manipulative git. Jericho doesn't bend to his every whim, but Stephen does know how to guilt trip him.

    Jericho's too nice for his own good, really.
     
    Ack said:
    This being the deep South, however, not everyone shared his views. There were those (Pickup, among others) who implicitly believed that the right to bear arms had been handed down from on high along with the Ten Commandments, and acted accordingly. Such people, when encountering a prohibition against carrying firearms into any given place, had been known to move heaven and earth to get that prohibition lifted.
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    Those who do not defend their rights, end up with none.

    As an Australian, I can tell you that first hand.
     
    Finally!

    I do have to wonder about building a city in the middle of nowhere, but... land was cheap?
     
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    Wow, that was a fantastic chapter. The first one I've read, but I'm excited for more!
     
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    You do know there's 30 before it, and 4 prologues before that, right?

    Also, thanks :D
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    Yup, I like to jump into the middle of books to see if they're good, because a lot of them have slow/boring starts. Also, you're welcome! You're a good writer!
     
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    kabs said:
    Yup, I like to jump into the middle of books to see if they're good, because a lot of them have slow/boring starts. Also, you're welcome! You're a good writer!
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    I tried not to make the beginning too slow or boring.
     
    That was perhaps a bit hasty... they weren't asking him anything that reporters wouldn't, tho I understand taking that line of questioning harder from people he looks up to than a jerkoff from fox
     
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    That was perhaps a bit hasty... they weren't asking him anything that reporters wouldn't, tho I understand taking that line of questioning harder from people he looks up to than a jerkoff from fox
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    He was handling it okay until people started pushing hard on the gay aspect. Especially asking him if he was ashamed of being gay.

    And yes, Independence was deliberately pushing his buttons.

    Also, it doesn't help that he's currently got a serious amount of emotional trauma going on.
     
    I mean, it makes sense, but I doubt he'll explain why it hit him so hard what with the whole secret identity and perceived betrayal

    Edit: I wouldn't be surprised if Jer applied to the UCPD after catching his cousin's killer as a way of thumbing his nose to FM and staying in UC, as it seems like he's enamored with the city
     
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    Mr. Tebbs said:
    I mean, it makes sense, but I doubt he'll explain why it hit him so hard what with the whole secret identity and perceived betrayal

    Edit: I wouldn't be surprised if Jer applied to the UCPD after catching his cousin's killer as a way of thumbing his nose to FM and staying in UC, as it seems like he's enamored with the city
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    Oh, he won't stay back and explain. As far as he's concerned, him and Force Majeure are done.

    He likes the city, but he's got other issues to deal with right now. And he doesn't really like the UCPD.
     
    Whoos weee Ack, gotta say I didn't see that coming
     
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    So, guy who threw the glass.. sounds like a control freak with a temper in the hardest city to be a villain in without being someone like lex Luthor. Is that Relentless?
     
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