Yohnos
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Yes, For You.
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Yes, For You.
Second this. Also, love the story and characterizations!Love the story, especially the Anakin/Dinah dynamic. I hope she is his only apprentice. Most Worm fics try to force Taylor, Lisa, and Amy into the main character's circle even if the story would be better off not doing it.
"PRT" You made this mistake a few times.
Love the story, especially the Anakin/Dinah dynamic. I hope she is his only apprentice. Most Worm fics try to force Taylor, Lisa, and Amy into the main character's circle even if the story would be better off not doing it.
the problem i that many of the Masters is very bad news, it's almost like a panic button (for very good reasons)This chapter actually doesn't paint the PRT in a good light at all, they are getting tunnel vision on Anakin as a Master that they are ignoring every other aspect of what was said and what happened with no deviation. Honestly the interaction with Miss M as a whole felt forced for plot reasons. That might just be me though, either way I cant wait for Anakin to get his base shored up and ready to start expansion if it goes that route.
This chapter still says there was 33 mercenaries.Thirty three deaths, all of who seemed to be some kind of mercenary, millions of dollars in property damage and the abduction of Dinah Alcott, the Mayor's niece. The mercenaries didn't have any gang indications and the PRT was uncertain of who they belonged to.
Would the force fuck with his timeline messing shenanigans?
It'd be pretty funny to see him getting screwed over because the force is literally pulling the strings on him. Pretty ironic lol
Plus Coil's powers is more like simulator and not actually timeline splitting so something like the force is the exact type of outside context problem to give Coil's power a kick to the balls.At the end of the day Anakin is the Force's Chosen One so by all accounts it should favor him quite a bit.
Tattletale interlude when lol. Interested to see what terrified her so much.
Plus Coil's powers is more like simulator and not actually timeline splitting so something like the force is the exact type of outside context problem to give Coil's power a kick to the balls.
That is a huge compliment from him, considering that Fett was one of the few people he well not liked, but trusted to keep his word. As long as Faultline keeps to the contract, she just made a huge ally.She honestly reminded him of Boba Fett, calm, efficient and productive, it remained to be seen if she would be as effective.
So, I'm also stealing this meme, I will be using it every time I change something:
First-> in the initial chapter, Anakin killed 33 mercenaries, it has been pointed out that it was too many and I agree, it was something I put in to make the scene epic at a time when I didn't know if I'd be continuying this story.
The numbeer has changed (More like, I'll be changing it in an hour or two, kinda busy right now), he killed 11 mercenaries, the number is far more reasonable without altering the feel of Anakin's power in the scene.
Second -> In Miss Militia chapter, the PRT will briefly discuss Dinah's power and the claim that there are moles in the organization, basically, they can't be certain the girl even has powers, but they're threating it as if she has, it doesn't change the fact that she could be saying her predictions because of Anakin's master power and their priority is still Bakuda, followed by recovering Dinah and then checking for moles.
There's just too much of a Master prejudice and the fact is, even if he wasn't a master, Anakin is an adult keeping a preteen girl away from her parents. They could have come to an agreement or believed his claims, but the first thing he did was kill 11 guys and cause millions in damage so...