torac
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The book is talking about humankind, and the intended audience is probably humans. You could theoretically just use the biblical "Ye" to address them.The more I think about it, the more I see your point. I think if it becomes really distracting, I'll change it to 'Yay' or omit it altogether.
What do you think would be a fair alternative?
"And so did Man reign in the Kingdom of Heaven, with the Mandate of the Divine allowing him to commune with the Tian (Gods) of the earth and of the skies, who crafted Man in their own image."
He turned to images of a hierarchical, pyramid-like structure, with mortal men standing at the top and all other beasts of the earth beneath him, ending with base stone and precious minerals at the foundation.
"Ye he shall rule over all living things as the avatar of the Gods, and champion their worship throughout the earth. He shall walk with them in their golden halls, and man shall know that he art chosen."
"Ye shall rule over all living things […] Ye shall walk with them in their golden halls, and man shall know that he art chosen."
Directly addressing the reader, then switching back to third person. Slightly clunky, but suitably bombastic.