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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

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Mr Zoat said:
Far more air is being moved that its wings could actually move,
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Slightly awkward phrasing? Suggest changing the second use of the word move? Maybe 'its wings could account for'? I realize this is a style suggestion, and do not mean to offend.

Mr Zoat said:
But who need realism when you've got magic and a power ring?
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needs?

The use of it/its is an intentional representation of OL only just remembering the Karfang's gender, not an error right?
 
Eponymic said:
Slightly awkward phrasing? Suggest changing the second use of the word move? Maybe 'its wings could account for'? I realize this is a style suggestion, and do not mean to offend.
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No, I think I'll leave that.
needs?
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Thank you, corrected.
The use of it/its is an intentional representation of OL only just remembering the Karfang's gender, not an error right?
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No, he got a better look at her shoulder to hip ratio.
NullVoid said:
I found this sentence extremely hard to parse.
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Are you a dragon?
Silveraith said:
Than.
Me.
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Thank you, corrected.

In other news, droplr -the site where I host linked images- is ending free hosting. I'm moving over to ImgBB, so let me know if you notice some links no longer working.
 
So is Paul having a background trickle of magical lore fed into his brain on a regular basis? He has to have access to enough texts available to him to be picking up at least hedge magic, even if it's Atlantean apprentice's cantrips, and it seems to be a continuing problem for him. or can he not do magic the usual way because of his soul structure?
 
Coda said:
breathe
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Thank you, corrected.
If you'd like some dedicated hosting I could turn on image uploading for the WTR wiki for your account.
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Thank you for the offer, but I'm fine for now.
Citizen said:
So is Paul having a background trickle of magical lore fed into his brain on a regular basis? He has to have access to enough texts available to him to be picking up at least hedge magic, even if it's Atlantean apprentice's cantrips, and it seems to be a continuing problem for him. or can he not do magic the usual way because of his soul structure?
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There are no such things as cantrips in this setting, either in the sense of 'not prepared when most spells have to be' or in the sense of 'draw a card'.

The SI has studied Atlantean thaumaturgy, but his soul structure makes a lot of it unusable to him.
 
Mr Zoat said:
There are no such things as cantrips in this setting, either in the sense of 'not prepared when most spells have to be' or in the sense of 'draw a card'.

The SI has studied Atlantean thaumaturgy, but his soul structure makes a lot of it unusable to him.
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To clarify what I meant I was thinking 'minor spells safe and/or useful enough for apprentices to learn as part of their advancement to greater mastery of the art', but thank you for your answer.
 
Citizen said:
To clarify what I meant I was thinking 'minor spells safe and/or useful enough for apprentices to learn as part of their advancement to greater mastery of the art', but thank you for your answer.
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He kinda sorta did, ' "Medphyll wouldn't teach me how to control plants like he does. And to be fair, he probably didn't know how to. But with observation, meditation and experimentation… All Things Strive. '

From OL's fight with Kilowog. I'm pretty sure it's extremely limited, and am unsure how much is a function of the Power Ring vs Orange Light manipulation vs Magic. But, there is also the scene where OL eats Stephan's spell, via the Ring, so he can at least, in limited ways, use the Best Light to interface with magic.

Maybe via his soul, maybe via the Ring. Maybe both?

It'd be a bit OP to give OL more than limited access to magic, imho. Be cool to see a bit though.
 
Eponymic said:
He kinda sorta did, ' "Medphyll wouldn't teach me how to control plants like he does. And to be fair, he probably didn't know how to. But with observation, meditation and experimentation… All Things Strive. '

From OL's fight with Kilowog. I'm pretty sure it's extremely limited, and am unsure how much is a function of the Power Ring vs Orange Light manipulation vs Magic. But, there is also the scene where OL eats Stephan's spell, via the Ring, so he can at least, in limited ways, use the Best Light to interface with magic.

Maybe via his soul, maybe via the Ring. Maybe both?

It'd be a bit OP to give OL more than limited access to magic, imho. Be cool to see a bit though.
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I don't mind it being a slow burn effort, he's a busy man and has biological immortality so picking up a bit here and there rather than some sort of deep dive in the books and coming out an effective spellcaster is both more reasonable and less OP. I did like how he became the world's foremost expert on scrying wards though.
 
Pinklestia said:
Paul is not callling his friendly snake goddess yet because he is being an idiot.
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Admittedly, He can't expect to call on the Ophidian for every single problem. That's probably end with them merging again anyway.

Plus, she's a pretty big nuke....and that's not always the best choice.
 
Prince Charon said:
... so, you thought she was ten or eleven?
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I meant it as a joke about how 6-7 real life years are less than 2 years in universe. I cant even really imagine how long it would take for 6-7 in universe years to pass. I think Zoat would be in his sixties by then.
 
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Hoard (part 18)
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    • 12th January
    00:06 GMT +1

    "I will burn-"

    Karfang flaps, desperately trying to gain height as we head for the exit. She might be capable of moving at a decent speed, but it looks like there's only so much that magic can do as far as acceleration goes.

    "-everything your wretched-"

    Why isn't her ring helping her? Flying is a fairly basic function. Even if she didn't know that rings did that before she saw me-. She saw me. She now has a better idea of what rings can do. Unless it's already out of power, which would be nice.

    "-kind has ever-"

    Pride. The same reason why I still look basically like myself, rather than the most handsome male model ever. And why my penis is entirely unaltered. A dragon would be proud of its ability to fly and its magic, it would probably hesitate to-.

    "get back here!"

    An orange construct chain wraps itself around my legs. My continued flight pulls it taut a second later, Zatanna gasping quietly as she feels the sudden deceleration and spots the cause. I keep pulling, forming a railgun construct and loading a crumbler round as I do so. Fire, and flare my environmental shield to increase the power my rings are putting into flight-

    Beneath us, a section of vertiginously suspended bridge explodes upwards, shattering over Karfang's head and shoulders as she flaps after us!

    -aura as the construct chain shatters. I begin rising again immediately, the burst of fire Karfang throws my way lapping at my heels.

    "Orange Lantern to Superboy."

    "Superboy here."

    "We have a dragon with a power ring. Also, some sort of airborne environmental contaminant. Environmental shields and spell eaters all around."

    "Got it. How big is the dragon?"

    "About one hundred and fifty metres total. She also ignored everything I threw-" We come to the uppermost platform and I change direction, heading for the entrance tunnel. "-at her, so there's something else going on as well."

    Into the tunnel, and I generate a construct vault door to cover our retreat. She won't be able to fit through here-. I haven't seen any sign of her being able to change her size, the tunnel isn't big enough to fit her and however strong she is this is a lot of rock-.

    There's a tremendous crash, and a moment later my construct door fails as magic-enhanced draconic fire races up the passageway behind me!

    "Erif Pots!"

    The fire freeze-frames behind us as I fly through the illusory barrier and into the open air. Bio-ship over there, Kaldur… Kaldur in a meditative posture on the ground, eyes closed and hands clasped together in front of him, but I can see the orange light surging within him, held in check by his intense concentration.

    Karfang doesn't appear to be flying through the side of the mountain, so I descend, Kaldur's eyes unsteadily blinking at me as I set Zatanna on the ground.

    "Zatanna, can you remove the effect-" I take an environmental shield out of subspace and attach it to Kaldur's armour. It's a basic, fragile, limited battery life thing but it should filter out toxic gasses. "-of whatever Karfang was breathing on us?"

    "I should be able to…"

    A violet aura surrounds Kaldur's head for a moment and he gasps, his violet-glowing eyes snapping open.

    "Aqualad." I regard him cautiously. "You back with us?"

    He takes a couple of breaths, then nods. "Yes. I believe that I am."

    "What were you experiencing?"

    "It was… As if the world existed purely to give me what I wanted, and that nothing but satisfying my own desires mattered." I get a momentary look at exactly what it was he wanted. "It was all I could do to resist." He glances up as the Bio-Ship descends, then looks back to me. "I believe that I have gained a better understanding of what it means to be an Orange Lantern."

    "Maybe. But Orange Lanterns learn to stay functional when they feel like that. If you're interested in training-" The Bio-Ship comes in to land, Wallace dashing out immediately. "-to do so, I'd be happy to make time for it."

    "You.. saw." I nod. "I would not have acted-."

    "You didn't act. But ignoring your desires indefinitely isn't a good idea."

    He nods-.

    "Hey, Zatanna." Wallace comes to a stop just in front of her. "You ran into a drag-." He blinks. "Are you okay?"

    "Perfectly." She comes over and wraps her left arm around my right. Just as Artemis steps out of the Bio-Ship. "I'm exactly where I want to be."

    "O…" Wallace gives me a puzzled frown. "Kay..?"

    "Something Karfang did altered people's behaviour. I wasn't affected but the rest of our team were."

    "You can't fix-."

    "I don't need fixing. I don't want anything I didn't want before."

    He hesitates for a moment as the rest of the team leave the Bio-Ship. Robert's with them, but he hasn't been studying metamagic. Doctor Balewa is a far better choice for undoing this. And I'm pretty sure that she'd violently resist efforts to change her back now.

    "I'm sure that we can talk about it after dealing with the dragon."

    Wallace doesn't look happy, but he decides not to push it. Artemis gives me a pointed look, but stands at ease to wait for instruction. Empathic vision shows Beryl still in the Bio-Ship while Richard, Kon, Raquel and Robert form a semicircle around us. I blink as I realise that the Sphere has accompanied them, and it shifts into its flying bike mode. And all of them have environmental shields and spell eaters, good.

    Richard smiles. "You found a dragon, Oh El? Thought you said it wasn't gunna be a dragon?"

    "I may possibly have been slightly wrong. One dragon, one hundred and fifty metres in length and in possession of an orange power ring with at least a partial charge. The dragon is intelligent and invulnerable to anything I threw at it."

    "Okay, that's-."

    "In addition, it has an army of mutant gnomes, and Canis and Osiris were caught in the mind altering gas and haven't reappeared. I'm not that worried about-."

    Kon's head suddenly turns towards the mountain. "Does the dragon have a way out of the mountain?"

    "I didn't see any tunnels big enough."

    "Because that rock's getting-"

    The side of the mountain explodes!
     
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    • DAT_NOOB said:
    personally I find it hilarious, now all we need to do is have Jade come back right now and the dryad to arrive for crazy harem shenanigans
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    Add in the spider queen and that one feline girl from pirate world and it's pretty much the DC version of Monster Musume.
     
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